>>53909
After reading your next story ("Alley Sentries"), I'm pretty sure you're not that big on words, are you? ;D
Well, this time the "narrative" was improved with a (very) short intro, a longer middle part and a kind of happy(?) ending.
"Stealing Cargo PT1" begins with a brief introduction of the opponents. Even this single sentence provides the reader with enough information to be drawn into the performance. Another comment every now and then might also be helpful, e.g. "Officer Cat arrived after some neighbors reported a shooting."
You get the idea? However, keep on rocking ...