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2017/06/13
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>>24578
>>24578
You have done a pretty impressive job. Let me correct some minor mistakes. I kept the correct parts as they were.
ไฟบๆงใฎใใณใธใงใณใซไพตไบบใใฆๆฅใๅฅณๆฆๅฃซ...
I came upon a female warrior intruding in my dungeon one day.
ใใใคใๅค่ฆใ ใใงไฟบๆงใฎใใจใ้้ญใขใณในใฟใผใ ใจๅ้ใใใฆใใใ.
She looked at me like I was some small fry monster- she was sorely mistaken.
ใใใใๅ้ใๅฅณใซใฏ (LV99) ใฎ ไฟบๆงใใไป็ฝฎใใใใฆใใใๅฟ ่ฆใๆใใใใ ใช.
It's a matter of course for a level 99 like myself to punish such a foolish girl.
"ใชใใ ้้ญใ...ใ,ใใจ็ใฅใใฆๅธฐใใใฆใใใใจใใใ."
"What's this, some small fry...? Well then, I'll have no trouble disposing of you."
2.
ใพใใฏ่ปฝใ้ๅธธๆปๆใ1็บ๏ผ
Let's start with one light common attack, first.
3.
ใใฃใใ่ใใฆๆใใฃใ็ธๆใใพใใ่ชๅใใๅงๅ็ใซใใจใฏๆใใๅฏใใชใใฃใใใใ ใช
It seems it never occurred to her to that she might come across a being overwhelmingly more powerful than herself.
"ใ? ใ?!"
"Huh? Huh?!"
"ใ...ๅฃๆพใใชใ[?]... ใใ...? ็งใฎ่ ? ใใ...!?"
"My... My sword fell... What...? My arms? What...!?"
4.
ไฟบๆงใซๅบไผใใชใใใฐใใใชใใฎๆฆๅฃซใซใชใใใใใใใใ...
She might have become a halfway decent warrior if we did not meet.
ไธก่ ใๅคฑใฃใ้็ฃจใฎใพใพ็ใใใฆใใใฎใๅใใ ใชใ ๆญขใใๅบใใฆใใใ.
It would be pathetic to leave an armless daruma alive like that. I'll go ahead and put an end to this.
"ใ[?]...ใ...ๅฉใ...ใใ...ใฒใ"
"It... It hurts... Help... Hel-- PAAH"
5.
ๅใพใใๅฅณๆฆๅฃซใใใใชใใจ็กๆงใชใขใใ ใช...
The brave warrior girl's death ended up being pretty unsightly.
ใดใใชใณใใ่ญใ็ณๅฐฟใ้ใๆตใใฆใใใ.
Her piss and shit smell worse than a goblin too.
ใใ่ ฟ่ใ ใใใฃใใๆดๆตใใฆใใ็พๅณใใ้ ใใจใใใ.
That's some good thigh meat though. It'll make quite a delicacy, after some thorough cleaning at least.
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