The first one is so hot omg.
I LOVE girls damaging their exposed brain 🧠

>>133431
I don't see what the point of editing it was, I think the average western reader can understand Page 01, Page 02, Page 03 etc while reading pages from right to left.

You altered a lot of the original art and I think most peeps would rather just have it close to the original.

(Original translated version without major edits)

https://www.mediafire.com/file/vs4e10edrtgw5jw/Applicant+for+Death.zip/file

Hi Nikki. Yes the original appeals to some or most. This is my edit. I don't like reading right to left. Sort of like driving in a foreign country where they drive on the 'wrong' side of the road and I can't adjust. I also don't like the massive black characters covering parts of the picture, not sure what they are - possibly sound effects like western comics? 'Bam' 'Zap' and the old time favourite for a machine gun 'Rata-tata-tata'.

And that's why I edit and flip.

>>133483
Well, you do you doll. Just remember some other readers prefer it the way I mentioned.

It's a rare hentai manga now (to the point someone got ransomware trying to find it) so it's best to allow choices. <3

thank you for posting the original

original

original

end of original images

I like left to right better

Oh wow!! Did this get re-translated, or is the new dialog new? Some of the text is very different! It is so nice to see it not censored though!

Looks like some minor alterations in
the text. Maybe different translation
to keep story intact? Edit mostly
to read Western direction and smooth
the pictures.

>>134039
Some of the pages above almost like the opposite meaning. Like, the whole scene where the girl beheads her brother she was originally sad to learn that he was the one on her work list for the day, but this edit she wakes him up and is all excited for him. He originally has a line like "I'm sorry sis. By the time you get home I'll be dead." and here it's "Almost time. Today I am going to die... It makes me so horny!" So, which is more accurate to the original japanese?

I like the edits. It was fun to read through, and I love that it's been decensored. I'm just really curious which is more faithful to what's actually being said in the original and I can't translate japanese almost at all. Machine translation only takes you so far...

A problem translating Japanese is that the Kanji characters may have a different meaning depending on the context/subject they describe The girl who is told to kill her brother works for 'boss' but the character can mean boss, teacher, director so it's hard to guess which to use.

>>134073
Don't obsess so much, use your imagination to fill in the gaps. Just from the pics alone you can tell she gets horny thinking about wanting her brain blown out, what's it matter what variation of moonspeak she's jabbering?

Translations can be difficult. I speak Dalmation, Schnauzer and German Shepherd. Did you know that 'Wuuf wuuf, bark, grrr' in French Poodle means 'Good Morning' but it translates to 'I'm your bitch, fuck me hard, in German Shepherd.

>>134073

> Like, the whole scene where the girl beheads her brother she was originally sad to learn that he was the one on her work list for the day, but this edit she wakes him up and is all excited for him.

The right-to-left translation is a little off, but the left-to-right one is just a rewrite at that point.

Here's what they actually say on that page as far as I could translate from the Japanese original:

***

Sister: Sora, if you don't get up soon, you'll be late.

Sister: Huh? What's the matter?

Sora: Nothing...

Sister: Turn this way a little.

Sister: Looks like you don't have a fever.

Sister: I have morning practice, so I'll go first.

Sister: Meal is prepared, so make sure to properly eat.

***

So, at this point the sister has no clue that the brother is planning to die today, she's just waking him up for school as usual. She's leaving first for "morning practice", my guess is in kendo, which would fit her handling the sword. It might even be that this "morning practice" is also her cover for her job for Sensei, where she's then surprised to learn that her brother will be today's client. Though that's pure speculation, and it might just be that the morning practice is honestly a kendo practice, and the job comes later in the day, like after school.

Anyway, there's no mention of Sensei coming to their place. So the scene where Sora and Sister meet again is not a direct continuation of her waking him up, it happens later in the day and at a different place. It looks like the place has cracks in walls, same as could be seen in Yayoi's part of the story, so probably the same place and not anyone's home. It's reasonable to assume Sensei has a dedicated place for this job.

Since I'm at it, I've spent the evening checking the translation of the Guillotine Masturbation part. Disclaimer: I've never formally studied Japanese, just watched a lot of anime so that I have enough feel for it to see where Google Translate is off.

The right-to-left translation seems mostly correct, but there are some inaccuracies and liberties.

Main errors of the existing translation:

- Akira doesn't ask "Do you have any doubts", he asks "Are you still conscious?" So there's no implication of any sort of doubt.
- Akira doesn't say anything about "Great present", he says "It was the BEST feeling..." So there's no implication of it being sister's present to him.

Here's my whole translation (rough draft in term of phrasing, but meaning should be accurate):

気持ちいい？お姉ちゃん
Does it feel good, Onee-chan?

い．．．いいよもうイきそう．．．あっ
G...good! I'm about to come... Ah

お願いアキラ言ったとおりしてね
Please, Akira, do as I told you.

うんわかってる
Yeah, I know.

あ．．．．．．あひっ．．
Ah... Ahh...

いっ！！ いくーっ！！
Co... coming!

***

あ．．．．．ああ．．．
Ah... A-ah...

あたし．．．．．．斬首されてる．．すごい
I... I've been beheaded... Wow

お姉ちゃん．．．まだ意識ある？
Onee-chan... are you still conscious?

***

ほらお姉ちゃん見て
Here, Onee-chan, look!

すごい．．．あたしの体．．．
Wow... my body...

あたしのまんこ．．．
My pussy...

まだヒクヒクしてる．．．
It's still twitching...

なめてみたい
I want to lick it

お願いアキラはやく
Please Akira, hurry up

ん．．．ちょっとしょっぱい
Hmm... It's a little salty.

これがあたしのまんこの味なのね
So this is what my pussy tastes like.

***

ああ．．．だんだん気が遠くなってきた
Ahh... I'm starting to gradually lose consciousness.

アキラ！最後にアキラのをしてあげたい
Akira! At the end I want to do you.

僕のをしてくれるの？
Will you do me?

お姉ちゃん．．．．．．
Onee-chan...

すごい．．．！！アキラのおちんちんはちきれそう．．．
Wow...!! Akira's dick looks like it's about to burst...

あう．．．お姉ちゃん！！
Ow... Onee-chan!!

出ちゃう．．．！！
It's coming out...!!

アキラ．．．あとはアキラの好きなように．．．して．．．．
Akira... From here on, do as you... please...

***

ありがとう．．．．．．
Thank you...

お姉ちゃん．．．
Onee-chan...

ここで見てて．．
Watch from here...

いいよねお姉ちゃんセックスしても
It's okay to have sex too, right, Onee-chan?
(literally: "even to have sex")

お姉ちゃんのおまんこ．．．まだあったかい
Onee-chan's pussy... still warm

***

気持ちいいよぉお姉ちゃん！！
It feels so good, Onee-chan!!

もっと
More...

もっと前へ．．．．．．
More forward...

(I'm not sure about the exact meaning of forward here or how to better say it in English, DeepSeek says he's asking her to push her hips more forward (so towards him? as in fuck back?), even if I explain to it the story and situation of her being dead and unable to do that, it still says that's what he must mean in the heat of the moment)

***

あっいいっ
Ah... good...

お姉さん僕もお姉ちゃんといっしょに．．．．．．
Onee-chan, I too together with Onee-chan...

もうだめお姉ちゃん
I can't anymore, big sister

僕出ちゃう！！
I'm coming!

いっ！！
Co... (cut-off coming)

***

いぐっ！！
Gum—!! (distorted and cut-off "cumming")
(his neck is being cut off, so c becomes g)

ああ．．．．．．
Aah......

こんな感じなんだ．．．．．．
So this is what it feels like...

Sfx: ぼふっ
*poof*

***

サイコーに気持ちよかったよ．．．
It was the BEST feeling... (deliberate emphasis on the word "best")

おねえ．．．．．．ちゃ．．．．．．ん
Onee-... cha-... n...

>>134484
This might be a silly question, but where did you find the Japanese original?
I'm studying Japanese and I want to be able to read the original Japanese version of the doujin but I can only find English, Italian and Chinese translations.

What I find confusing is boy is watching computer and told that they know him and what he wants, but doesn't really explain that his sister is working for the "boss" executor or why he doesn't know what his sister job is. There could be more explanation from the original. Might be the left to right is trying to explain what's happening. I do not read Japanese.

Could we be obsessing too much about this? Just enjoy what is there.

>>134511

Does Sad Panda say anything to you?
If not, another option is nhentai dot net
>>134513

Well, obviously Sora doesn't know about his sister's job beforehand, because she's hiding it, which she does because it's illegal.

As for why Sensei didn't mention his sister in the video... well, what point would it serve? So that they could talk about it beforehand? Would it necessarily be a good thing (for Sensei)? As they might end up talking each other out if it. Even as it was, sister tried to talk Sora out of it, but since they were already both excited in the heat of the moment they ended up going along. But it could've been different if they were given plenty of time to ponder and discuss it in the comfort of their home.

Besides, we know Sensei expects Sora to apply for death, but we don't know if she knows the exact method of death he would request. And if she doesn't then for her there's no point to introduce his sister as her assistant at this point, when for all she knows the said assistant might not even end up being involved.

And the out-of-story reason is that having it be as it is makes a better and hotter story flow with sister's involvement being a surprise like this. If sister's involvement would be revealed in the video, before we even meet her in the story, it wouldn't hit as hard, because to us she'd be just a new random character being introduced. The way it is, she's introduced as Sora's caring older sister, and the whole exchange where she cluelessly checks in on him while he's secretly masturbating to his upcoming death is hot. And then the surprise reveal of her being Sensei's assistant is hot because we didn't expect the same caring older sister to also be a beheader, and it's hot that she's gonna behead the little brother she was just shown to care about. This dynamic wouldn't have worked if she was introduced as a beheader right away.

>>134536
I ended up finding it on Sad panda, i had looked before but I didn't think to look in Japanese.

>>134484
I read the japanese version and I do believe she is heading to kendo practice in that panel. since she is said to be the leader of the school sensei works at's kendo club, I don't think it would make much sense for her to be working all day long unless they killed sora first thing in the morning.

>>134540
Yes, when I said kendo could be a cover for the job, I meant they kill Sora first thing in the morning. I agree that it sounds more reasonable to assume they do it after school, it's just that for all we know we can't 100% exclude the morning option. Either way that doesn't really matter.

Wirklich?

>>134553
...I kinda wanna read the rest of the cheese story

Sorry about that, chief.

For you youngsters, Rosebud is a sled from the 1941 movie "Citizen Kane" by Orson Welles.

>>134608

Spoilers dude

That first one is literally exactly how I want to die. I saw the JFK death footage in high school and it fucked me up in a similar way. That was pretty much the start of it. I've never felt so seen in my life.

>>134553
🤣

>>134193
Ah! This is true! I studied Japanese for a while many years ago (didn't keep up on it though) and I remember Kanji being a hell of a thing. Like, it could make interesting jokes or puns because you'd verbally say something very ambiguous, but the Kanji would make it clear what you said. Wish I could remember an example.

>>134194
>>134514
This is not obsessing (for me anyway) this is fun. Japanese is a *very* different language from English and subtly and nuance are often lost. I love finding out what didn't make it through translation. It can make a story so much more enjoyable.

>>134484
Oh!! Thank you! It's nearly identical, but the minor changes make sense.

>>134500
Thank you so much! Guillotine Masturbation is my favorite and I tried to take a crack at translating the Japanese Original too.

Fuck, I was only translating the page where Onee-chan dies and it was tough! I wish I had kept up on the practice after learning what I did in school. 😭

The "do as you... please..." was really difficult. I got fragments of that. I got just enough out of my translation to know that "Do what you want" was not exactly wrong, but it was a bit off. I got out something like "Akira... do as Akira pleases/desires" or something rough like that.

Because I'm so horrendously out of practice I was using a mix of Jisho.org, Deepl.com, and some japanese alphabet references.

Speaking of which:
Deepl says that もっと前へ... means "Go back further" which doesn't make any sense. Jisho.org says that the kanji 前 means "in front" or "before" with "forward" being a specific noun meaning. My best guess is that Akira is saying "More... More before..." which makes sense to me since he next says "I can't anymore, big sister", cums, then cuts off his head. Like, he's holding back his orgasm as much as he can to enjoy fucking her body, then hits his limit.

>>134511
You can read it on exhentai.org. You have to have an e-hentai.org account and be signed into it. Each time you sign into e-hentai you have to wait a minute or two before you attempt to visit exhentai or you will see the "sad panda" image instead of the site.

>>134742
> Thank you so much!
You're welcome!

> The "do as you... please..." was really difficult. I got fragments of that. I got just enough out of my translation to know that "Do what you want" was not exactly wrong, but it was a bit off.
Well, literally word-for-word it'd be something like "do how Akira likes", and at that point the translation from Japanese is done and translation into English begins: whether you choose to translate it as "do what you want" or "do as you please" is a question more about English than it is about Japanese. And English isn't my native tongue either. That's why I said my translation is a rough draft in terms of phrasing: I focused on deciphering the translating from Japanese part, rather than the translating into English part.

> Because I'm so horrendously out of practice I was using a mix of Jisho.org, Deepl.com, and some japanese alphabet references.
I used a software called Poricom for OCR, then pasted the text into google translate. But sometimes OCR goes wrong, so have to double check it, and sometimes google translate is off, so have to double check that too. But it's easier to double check after the computer than doing all the work from scratch. Even when google translate doesn't translate well, it spells out the pronunciation, and having the sentence mentally vocalized helps my brain to actually parse it much better than staring at unfamiliar kanji (which are most of the kanji for me). Even when I don't know half the words, having the sentence spelt out in a way I can read it puts those words into the grammatical structure of the sentence for me. Then I can find the individual words in a dictionary and fit it all together. LLMs are also helpful, as they can catch context and nuance that simple google translate doesn't.

> My best guess is that Akira is saying "More... More before..."
You mean like "more, before it's over"?
What happened to へ?
へ denotes a direction, so it'd be "towards the before", which wouldn't make sense in the context of "before it's over".
If you want to say "before something", you say "something の前に". And I don't think you can drop the something here, at best replace it with a pronoun (その前に - "before that").

Earlier I asked DeepSeek in two separate chats, in one just saying it's a sex scene, in the other explaining the whole beheading scenario, and it said both times that he's asking her to move her hips more forward, and why he's asking her even though she's dead is because he's caught in the heat of the moment.

Let me try one more idea... here, I asked it in a yet another chat about the meaning of that phrase if a guy is fucking a sex-doll that can't move or react to commands. It then says the guy talking in general can be one of the two:
1. He's instinctively talking to her as if she's alive. Basically, the same option it gave me before. To think of it, he does talk explicitly to her earlier when asking for permission, and in the last couple of pages he addresses her as well. I then asked if this was the case, what the command would mean, and he says to move her hips forwards towards him (so the same again).
2. He's thinking aloud, verbalizing his own actions. The action then can be either how he leans forward over her, or pushing his dick more forward inside of her. He does lean forward over her on the next page, doesn't he? On the other hand, the very next frame after him saying this is a close-up of his dick entering her pussy, so that option sounds plausible too, and probably even sounds more like something you'd verbalize in the heat of the action rather than just leaning forward.

I think the best thing here would be to study a collection of manga sex scenes featuring a similar phrase, but it's not like exhentai has a search in the full text of the mangas, so ...

>>134746
>>134742

Oh, almost forgot. Yarxi, a Japanese-to-Russian diectionary also gives "genitals" as one of the meanings of 前, although it's greyed out. I asked DeepSeek again, and it says that it is indeed used like that in Japanese slang, specifically for female genitals. But as I asked if it can be the meaning in the もっと前へ phrase in the context of this sex scene (leaving out the girl being dead detail this time), like about going deeper into the vagina, it said no, he's already inside, so moving "towards" the vagina makes no sense. And the meaning of moving her hips forwards towards them is more likely. It even writes a conclusion like this:

> In the context of him holding her leg up and pumping, this is classic Japanese erotic dirty talk for "Angle your hips up more towards me / push your hips forward" so that he can rub against that front wall. It is about adjusting the angle to hit a better spot, not about physically going deeper into the vaginal canal.

Well, I've noticed AIs have a tendency to call everything "ah, that's classic X", so dunno how trustworthy it is, but it is what it is.

So I've checked the Yayoi's part of the story.

The old translation is pretty good, I'm probably being too nitpicky here, but here is the list of differences:

Differences:

1. I can only be satisfied if I feel my brain burst apart -> As long as I can enjoy the moment my brain gets blown away, it's fine (she's saying she's okay if Sensei's methods to keep her conscious for longer don't work, as long as she gets to enjoy the blast itself it's enough for her)

2. Even a bullet can't break it -> It's made so that it won't shatter too much even if hit by a bullet. (It does shatter a little bit as we see on a further page)

3. By brain feels so soft, it's coming out (and so on) -> 'y bwain ish sho... it's co'ing ou' (she's having trouble speaking)

4. I'm wetting the floor -> Pee ish co'ing ou' (she's not worried about the floor)

5. I'll make you feel better -> (not exactly a mistake, but I'd phrase it like:) I'll make you feel even better

6. Bwain and pussy feel good (why did she start saying bwain only now?) -> Bwain and pusshy both fee' goo' ("both" is the difference)

7. (after "I can't take it anymore") Brain... coming out... (where did bwain go again?) -> Bwain... co'ing (here the word is cumming, not coming out)

8. Can I have an orgasm while touching my brain? -> 'ay I cum wish 'y bwain?! (she's not just cumming at the same time as touching her brain, she's cumming from it, brain is the instrument of cumming, also the word touching isn't really there)

9. Apply for death. Just have fun dying as someone special. -> People who, yearning for death, want to experience a specific death.

10. We are looking for talent like that -> We are looking for people like that (she's not calling yearning for death a talent)

11. Waiting for your call -> Waiting for your reply. (doesn't specify it must be a phone call)

***
And here's my whole translation draft:

003

Title: 他殺志願
Applicant for Death

奥村やよいです
This is Yayoi Okumura.

これから死にます
I'm going to die now.
004

やよいちゃんの希望は銃で頭を撃ち抜かれて死にたいだったわね
Yayoi's wish was to be shot in the head and die, right?

どうしてそんな死に方がしたいの？
Why do you want this method of death?

えー言うんですか？恥ずかしいな
Eh, to say that? That's embarrassing.

前にＴＶで
Earlier on TV...

アメリカの大統領が暗殺されるシーンを見たんです
I saw a scene where the American president was assassinated.

頭がバンってはじけて
His head exploded

婦人が飛び散った脳みそをかき集めるの
How the Lady/Wife was gathering up the scattered brains

あれ見てあたし．．．．．．その．．
Seeing that made me... well...

濡れちゃって．．．．．．
all wet...

それから毎日自分の頭を撃ち抜かれる事を想像しては
Every day after that I fantasized about being shot in the head.

オナニーを．．．．．．
Masturbating...

あ
Ah

でも．．．．．．「自分の脳が噴き出すのを見たい」．．
But... "I want to see my own brain explode."

この要望は難しいわね
This request is difficult.
005

そうなんですか？
Is that so?

普通脳を撃たれたら瞬間的に意識を失うから．．．
Normally, if you're shot in the brain, you lose consciousness instantly...

でもまあできるだけやってみるわ
But I'll try my best.

アドレナリンとモルヒネを注射してできるだけショックを抑えます
Injecting adrenaline and morphine will minimize shock as much as possible.

銃は小口径の高速弾の方が意識を保ちやすいと思うけど
I think it'd be easier to maintain consciousness with a small-caliber, high-velocity bullet,

それじゃ穴が小さくて脳が外まで出ないから
but then the hole will be too small and the brain won't be able to get out.

炸薬を減らしたマグナムでできるだけ外側を撃ってみるわ
So I'll try shooting as far out as possible with a magnum with less explosive charge.

脳の右半分だけ上手く破壊すればかろうじて意識は残ると思うけど
I think if we manage to properly destroy only the right half of the brain, consciousness might only just (barely) remain.

保証はできないわよそれでいい？
But I can't guarantee anything, is that okay?

はいかまいません
Yes, I don't mind.

脳をふっとばされる瞬間を味わえればいいです
As long as I can enjoy the moment my brain gets blown away, it's fine.

想像するだけであたし．．．
Just imagining it, I... (makes me...)
006

じゃあこっちへ来て
Then come over here

はい
Yes

この鏡はね
This mirror, you see,

弾丸が当たっても大きく割れないようになってるの
It's made so that it won't shatter too much even if hit by a bullet.

だから自分の脳が噴き出すのを正面から観察するのに最適ってわけ
So it's perfect for observing your own brain explode head-on.

ふわぁ．．．
Ahhh...
007

弾は後頭部から入って
The bullet will enter through the back of the head,

脳の中を回転しながら突き進み
spinning while moving forward inside the brain,

この辺りから出てくるわ
and come out around here,

血と脳漿を撒き散らしてね
Scattering blood and brain matter.

ああん言わないでもうダメ！！
Ah, don't say it, I can't anymore!!

じゃあやるわよ
Alright, let's go.

はいお願いします
Yes, please.
008-009
(shooting)
010

大丈夫？まだ意識はある？
Are you okay? Are you still conscious?

左半身が麻痺してるみたいね
It looks like the left side of your body is paralyzed, eh.

支えてあげるわ
I'll support you.

あらひの．．．．．．のうみそ．．．やわ．．．
(私の脳みそ柔らかい)
'y bwain ish sho..(ft)

出へる
(出てる)
It'sh co'ing ou'

すごいあらひののうでへるよう．．．ひあ
(すごい私の脳出てるよ)
Wow, 'y bwain is co'ing ou'!.. hya
012

あ あああ おしっこ出へるぅ
(おしっこ出てる)
Ah Aaah Pee iss co'ing ou'!

気持ちいひよぉ
(気持ちいいよ)
Feelsh goo'!

もっと気持ちよくしてあげる
I'll make you feel even better

あひいおま．．．ひぃ
(私おまおまんこ)
'y push... hi-

いあああひぃい！！
Iaaahii!!
013

おまんこ気持ひぃぃいん
Pusshy feelsh goo'

のうとおまんこりょうほう気持ひいい
Bwain and pusshy both fee' goo'

らめえ～～
(だめ)
I can't...

あらひもうらめぇ！！
(私もだめ)
I can't anymore!!

のう．．．イク
Bwain... co'ing

あらひのうでイっていひ！？
(私脳でいっていい！？)
'ay I come wish 'y bwain!?

もちろん好きにしていいのよ
Of course, you may do whatever you want.


014

のう．．．
Bwain...

あらひののう．．．
(私の脳)
'y bwain...

あ
Ah

ひゆび．．．はいやわらかあいふへあ
(ゆび 入る 柔らかい)
phingersh... ent'r ... shooft... fue-ah

ああはいぃる
Aah, ent'in'

のうのなか
inshide the bwain

いく
coming

いくいくいくふ
coming coming coming fuah
015
Sfx: どぶん
squelch

Sfx: いにゃあ
inyaah!

Sfx: びくん
jerk

Sfx: がくがく
shiver

Sfx: びくっ
twitch

Sfx: ぴゅるっ
squirt
016

Sfx: びく
twitch

お休みなさい
Good night,

やよいちゃん
Yayoi-chan
017

はあ はあ
ha-a ha-a

パッ

このＤＶＤは一般には販売されていません
This DVD is not available for general sale.

ご注文をいただいても通常は表のＡＶを発送しております
Even if you place an order, we usually ship a cover-up AV.

こちらで調査の上
We conduct our own investigation

口が堅く内容にふさわしい金額をお支払いいただける方にのみお売りしています
and only sell to those who are discreet and willing to pay a fair price for the contents.

ただし調査の結果それ以外の方に無料でお分けする事もあります
However, based on the results of the investigation, we may also give them away for free to others.

そうあなたのような方です
Yes, someone like you.

みていただいてお分かりのように
As you understand from having watched this,

私たちの作品に出演するモデルは自ら強く死を望んでいる人たちです
The models who appear in our works are people who by themselves strongly desire death.

借金や病気などの苦痛から逃れるための死ではなく
Death is not a means of escaping from the pain of debt or illness.

死にあこがれ特殊な死を経験したい人
People who, yearning for death, want to experience a specific death.

そのような人を私たちは求めています
We are looking for people like that.
018

私たちはあなたにお望みの死を与えることができます
We can give you the death you desire.

まさか
No way...

この人．．．
This person...

連絡先は．．．別に言わなくてもわかるわね
My contact information is... I'm sure you know it without me having to tell you.

連絡待ってます
I'm waiting for your reply.

井上空くん
Inoue Sora-kun

せ．．．
Se...

先生！！
Sensei!!

Well this has certainly brought out the best in translators. Thanks youse guys.

Finally made myself go through the second chapter.

Turns out there are plenty of mistakes / liberties in the old translation:

- When Ayaka checks Sora's temperature she concludes he seems to NOT have a fever

- Wait, who's Ayaka? Turns out Onee-chan has a name, which we learn on page 27 (now that I look at it, the translation also removed the page numbers)

- She's not saying anything about teacher coming to their place, she's saying she's heading out for morning practice

- Page 21 is missing in this thread's upload of the translation, although it exists on sad panda or nhentai

- In the missing page in the old translation Ayaka is saying "I know this is messed up... but chopping off heads is the ultimate thrill". The text I got in this place is "I'm... a pervert who gets off to murder... Cutting people down feels the best." It may seem like not a lot of difference, but: 1) while she calls herself a pervert, to me it doesn't come off as judgmental as "I know this is messed up", 2) she admits right away it's sexual, while in the old translation she just says it's messed up and a thrill, 3) she doesn't specify chopping heads off, so we can imagine she can do other kinds of cuts too.

- Where the old translation says "My boss told me to do you. We must stop this, though", she's actually saying "I've already cleared it with Sensei. Sora, let's stop this." That is, she discussed it with Sensei and Sensei said it's okay for them to not go through with it.

- Then when she says "there's no way I could behead my own brother", she starts it with "as an older sister". This is important, because Sora's respond isn't "You're saying we have to stop, but I know you want to it. I know you want to cut off my head!" His real response is: "Not as an older sister. What about you yourself, Onee-chan? My neck... don't you want to cut it?" As in, protecting her little brother is her duty as an older sister, but he's asking her to not think of that role and think of what she herself wants as a person.

- "No, if I go any further, I'll..." -> "No good... just imagining it... feels like I'm gonna cum..."

- "If you really want to behead me... enough with these games!" -> "Thinking about being cut down by Onee-chan... already made me like this..."

- "I want sis to chop off my head!" -> I want to be killed by Onee-chan. (doesn't specify chopping the head... not like they're implying a possibility of change of plans, but the words "chop off my head" aren't there, the words "be killed" are.)

- "And I will kill Sora!!" -> okay, this one is hard to express in English, but I wrote it as "Me too... I want to grant Sora's death." Specifically, she says "koroshite agetai" which is like "want to give the killing" rather than just want to kill.

- Ayaka: "Yes, I'm watching" -> "Yeah, I will watch Sora's loss of virginity."

- "Yes, I'm feeling..." -> "Somehow, me too..."

- "Pull yourself together! He'll come soon." -> "Pull yourself together, Ayaka-chan, Sora-kun is already about to cum." This is where we learn that Onee-chan's name is Ayaka. Sensei calls her Ayaka-chan a couple more times in the story, but it seems like the English translation left her name out?

- "I have to do it! I have to cut off his head!" -> "That's right, I have to cut off Sora's head." (she's not gathering resolve, she's regaining focus after being distracted by her own horniness)


- "Sora! I'm ready." -> well, technically she's saying "Sora!! It's okay now," but the implication is that it's okay for him to cum because she's ready, so I guess it works.

- "Now! Do it now, sis!" -> "It's coming out, Onee-chan... Now!" He doesn't have to repeat "now" twice for her to act.

- "Cumming... I can't..." -> "The feeling of cumming just keeps goung... Hya!! It won't stop."

- "I should be dead! My head is off yet I feel amazing!" -> "Even though I'm already dying, even though my head's been cut off... What do I do? It feels so gooood!!"

- "I can still feel" -> "Can you still feel it even as a severed head?" (probably). It's a speech bubble and not a thought bubble, so it can't be Sora's. Literally it says "Even as a living head, can still feel?" Living head (namakubi) is a Japanese term known as "freshly decapitated head" on pixiv, describing a head that was just decapitated and is still alive.

- "Sis, you look so happy" -> "Onee-chan... seems to feel so good..."

- "That's right, Sora! While fucking your corpse... I'll have myself killed!!" -> "I've always... yearned for this... while having sex with Sora's corpse... ...to commit seppuku!"

- "I'm sorry boss, but could I ask for your help?" -> "Sorry, Sensei, I won't be able to assist you anymore."

- "I think I already know what you have in mind..." -> "Somehow I had a feeling it would become like this." (literally: Somehow I had a feeling of "won't it become like this".)

- "Harakiri... I'm really committing harakiri!" -> she's saying seppuku, not harakiri

- "the feeling... pain..." -> "Agh... the pain... makes my vagina spasm..."

- "Uhhgh... his corpse came again..." -> Ah... no bay (no way)... Sora's... body... is cumming again

- "Sis! She is next to me..." -> "Onee-chan, more closer, me with Onee-chan..."

- "Teacher..." -> "Sensei, [move] us [closer]..." Japanese puts the verb after the object, so the object "us" is what's actually said, and we have to guess from the context that the verb must be "move closer". However leaving it as just "Sensei" doesn't convey that she's asking her to do something rather than just randomly calling her, so I think it could be something like "Sensei, move us..." or something.

- "You two look so happy now. I've never seen such a wonderful death" -> "The two of you... were absolutely wonderful. I've never seen such a beautiful death."

- "Thank you for waiting, Sora. Should we go together, sis?" -> these are speech bubbles, not though bubbles, so it's Sensei talking. She's saying "I kept you waiting, didn't I, Sora-kun? (could be adapted as: Sorry to have kept you waiting, Sora-kun) Go together with your onee-chan."

- "Just as you wished for..." -> "To tell the truth, Ayaka-chan"

- "But when... you asked me so nicely to kill you..." -> "Because if it was you... I thought you'd kill me beautifully..." (she's saying Ayaka would be the perfect successor because of all people Ayaka would be able to kill Sensei beautifully)
***
Full translation draft:

019

空～～そろそろ起きないと遅刻するよ
Sora, if you don't get up soon, you're gonna be late.

ん？どうかした？
Hm? What's the matter?

．．．．．別に
...Nothing

ちょっとこっち向いて
Turn this way for a moment.

熱はないみたいね．．．
It looks like there's no fever...

Title: 他殺志願 2
Applicant for Death 2

あたし朝練あるから先に出るね
I have morning practice, so I'm leaving first.

ご飯用意してあるからちゃんと食べて来るのよ
I've prepared breakfast for you, so make sure you eat it.
020

ごめんお姉ちゃん
Sorry, Onee-chan

SFX: どき どき
thump thump (heartbeat)

僕．．．．．．今日死ぬんだ．．．．．．
I'm... going to die today......

うっ！！
Urgh!

SFX: びゅくっ びゅるっ
Squirt, spurt

井上空です
This is Inoue Sora.

これから死にます
I'm going to die now.
021

空君の希望は「セックスして射精の瞬間首を刎ねられる」
セッケスの相手は私でいいの？
Sora-kun's wish is "while having sex to have the head chopped off at the moment of ejaculatiion".
Will I do for the sex partner?

はいお願いします
Yes, please.

私一人じゃ空君とセックスしながら首を刎ねるのは無理なのでお手伝いを呼んであるわ
All by muself I can't chop off Sora-kun's head while having sex, so I've called some help. (called an assistant)

剣道部の主将で今までも時々手伝ってもらってたの空君も知ってる人よ
She's a kendo club captain who also helped (assisted) me occasionally in the past, and also someone Sora-kun knows.

お姉ちゃん！！
Onee-chan!!

嘘！！ど．．．どうして！？
No way!! W... why!?

空．．．
Sora...

今まで隠していてごめんなさい
I'm sorry for having kept it hidden until now.

私．．．．．殺人淫楽症の変態なの．．．
I'm... a pervert who gets off to murder...

人を斬ると最高に気持ちいいの
Cutting people down feels the best. (literally: is the best feel-good)
022

先生には了解を取ってあるわ
I've already cleared it with Sensei. (cleared = got permission)

空こんな事やめましょう
Sora, let's stop this.

お姉ちゃん．．．．．．
Onee-chan......

姉として自分の弟を斬るなんてできない
As an older sister, I can't possibly cut down my own brother.

．．．．．．．．
........

姉としてじゃなく
Not as an older sister,

お姉ちゃん自身はどうなの？
僕の首．．．．．．斬りたくないの？
What about you yourself, Onee-chan?
My neck... don't you want to cut it?

空の．．．．．．首．．．．
Sora's... neck...

だめ．．．．．．想像しただけで．．．．イきそう．．
No good... just imagining it... feels like I'm gonna cum...

僕もだよお姉ちゃん
Me too, Onee-chan

お姉ちゃんに斬られるって思ったら．．．
Thinking about being cut down by Onee-chan...

もうこんなに．．．
already made me like this...
023

空．．．．．．
Sora...

すごい．．．
amazing...

あっ！！お姉ちゃんダメ！！
Ah!! Onee-chan, stop!!

そんな事したら．．．！！
If you do such a thing...!!

空のおちんちん
Sora's dick

熱くてびくびくしてる！！
is hot and twitching!!

ああっお姉ちゃん
A-ah... Onee-chan

出ちゃうっ！！
It's coming out!!

SFX: びゅっ

SFX: どぷっ！！
024

あ．．．．．．
Ah...

ああ．．．．．
A-ah...

SFX: びくっ びくっ びくっ ひくっ


お姉ちゃん．．．
Onee-chan...

．．．．．空．．．．．
...Sora...

どうする？空君
What will you do? Sora-kun.

やめてもいいのよ
It's okay to stop.

やります僕お姉ちゃんに殺されたい
We'll do it. I want to be killed by Onee-chan.

私も．．．．．空を殺してあげたい
Me too... I want to grant Sora's death.

いいのね．．．
So be it, then...
025

いい？入れるわよ空君
Ready? I'm putting it in, Sora-kun.

はいお願いします先生
Yes, please do, Sensei.

見ててお姉ちゃん
Look, Onee-chan.

僕初めてセックスするよ
I'm having my first sex!

うん見ててあげる空の童貞喪失
Yeah, I will watch Sora's loss of virginity.

ふわあぁっ！！
Fuwaaah!!

なにこれ！！ぬるぬるして締め付ける！！
What is this!? So wet and tight!!
026

どう？空君これが女の体よ
How's that? Sora-kun, this is a woman's body.

ああっ先生！！気持ちいいです
A-ah, Sensei!! It feels good.

あっ
Ah!

あっ
Ah!

ああ．．．．．空．．．あんなに気持ちよさそう
A-ah... Sora... looks like he feels so good.

なんだかあたしも．．．
Somehow, me too...
027

うくっ！！
Urgh!!

綾香ちゃんしっかりして空君もうイきそうよ
Pull yourself together, Ayaka-chan, Sora-kun is already about to cum.

は．．．はい
Y... yes!

そうよ私は空の首を斬ってあげなくちゃ
That's right, I have to cut off Sora's head.

空！！いいわよ
Sora!! It's okay now. [meaning: it's okay to cum now, I'm ready to chop your head off]

お姉ちゃん僕もう．．．！
Onee-chan, I'm already...!

あうっ出てる！！
Oh! It's coming out!!

出てるよお姉ちゃんい．．．今！！
It's coming out, Onee-chan... Now!
028

あ!!
Ah!!
029

SFX: ゴロ
rolling

あ．．．ああっっ！！
Ah... A-ah!!

射精してる感覚がそのまま続いて．．．ひぁっ！！止まらない
The feeling of cumming just keeps goung... Hya!! It won't stop.

もう死んじゃうのに首斬られたのに．．．どうしよう気持ちいいよぉ！！
Even though I'm already dying, even though my head's been cut off... What do I do? It feels so gooood!!

あっ空君のおちんちん．．．まだ射精してるっ．．．
Ah, Sora-kun's dick... still cumming...

僕の体．．．まだ動いてる
My body... still moving

空．．．．．．空の首．．
Sora... Sora's head...

ああ．．．空．．まだ生きてる？
A-ah... Sora... still alive?

生首でも感じる？
Can you still feel it even as a severed head?

お姉ちゃん...
Onee-chan...
030

ああっ！！空っ！！そらぁ！！
A-ah!! Sora!! Soraaa!!

イっちゃう！！あたし弟の生首でイっちやうよぉ！！！
I'm cumming!! I'm cumming from my little brother's severed head!!

お姉ちゃん．．．気持ちよさそう．．．
Onee-chan... seems to feel so good...

ああ．．．
A-ah...

暗く．．．なって．．．
Getting... dark...
031

．．．．．くん．．．．聞こえる？空君
...-kun... Can you hear me? Sora-kun.

！？
!?

僕．．．死んだはずじゃ
I... was supposed to be dead.

ごめんね死ぬ前にもうちょっと付き合って
Sorry, before dying please stay with us a little longer.

！！
!!

これ．．．何？管が．．．？
What is this? A tube?

人口心肺で血液を送り込んでいるの
We're pumping your blodd with a heart-lung machine.
(人口心肺 is a typo of 人工心肺 "heart-lung machine", it's spelled correctly later on page 32)

もちろん時的なものだけど意識を保っていられるわ
Of course, it's only temrorary, but you can remain conscious.

綾香ちゃんが空君に見て欲しいって言うから
Because Ayaka-chan said she wanted Sora-kun to see.

あっ
Ah!

あ．．．
Ah...

お姉ちゃん！？何を．．．．．．
Onee-chan!? What are you...
032

ずっと．．．．．．憧れてたの．．．．空の死体とセックスしながら
I've always... yearned for this... while having sex with Sora's corpse

はあ はあ
ha-a, ha-a

．．．．．．．切腹するの
...to commit seppuku!

ごめんなさい先生もう先生のお手伝いできなくなります
Sorry, Sensei, I won't be able to assist you anymore.

なんとなくこうなるんじゃないかと思っていたわ
Somehow I had a feeling of "won't it become like this".
Somehow I had a feeling it would become like this.

だから人工心肺装置も用意したのよ
That's why I had the heart-lung machine prepared.

ありがとう先生．．．
Thank you, Sensei...

じゃあ．．．！切腹します
Alright..! I will commit seppuku.

見ててね空．．．
Watch me, Sora...

見てるよ！！見たいよお姉ちゃんの切腹
I'm watching! I want to see Onee-chan's seppuku!

空．．．．．．
Sora...
033

ぅはっ！！
Uha!!!

いっ．．．．．．たぁ．．．
It... hurts...

うくっ．．．．．
Ugh...

はっ
Ha...

あ．．．
Ah...
034

はーっ
Haa!

せ．．．っ．．せっぷく．．．．．
Se... p... seppuku...

あたし．．．．．．ほんとに．．．．．．せっぷくしてる
I'm... really... committing seppuku...

はーっ
Haa!

あう．．．痛みで．．．膣が痙攣．．して．．
Agh... the pain... makes my vagina spasm...

そら．．．のおちんちん．．．気持ちいい
Sora's... dick... feels good.

ああ
A-ah

あ
Ah

あふぁ
Ahfah
035

おぎいいい
Ogi-i-i-i!!

あ．．．．．うぞ．．．
Ah... no bay... (no way)

そらの．．．カラダ．．また射精してる
Sora's... body... is cumming again

ああ．．．．．．そら．．．．．もう
A-ah... Sora... I can't anymore...

せん．．．せい
介．．．錯を．．．
Sen... sei
do the kaishaku...

いいのね綾香ちゃん
Very well, Ayaka-chan.
036

SFX: ドッ
Chop!

SFX: びゅるっ びゅるっ
squirt squirt
037

Sfx: びくっ びくっ
twitch twitch

Sfx: ぼとっ
Thud

お姉ちゃん．．．
Onee-chan...

ああ．．．．．そら．．．．空といっしょだよ
A-ah... Sora... I'm together with Sora!

SFX: ぽく ぽく
wriggle wriggle
(helpless gentle motion as if she's trying to move but can't - according to DeepSeek)

お姉ちゃんもっと近くに僕お姉さゃんと
Onee-chan, more closer, me with Onee-chan...

先生僕達を．．．
Sensei, [move] us [closer]...
(Japanese puts the verb after the object, so the object "us" is what's actually said, and we have to guess from the context that the verb must be "move closer")

最期にキスをしたいのね
Want to kiss at the end, don't you?

どう？
How's that?

ああ．．．先生ありがとう
A-ah... Sensei, thank you.
038

空．．．．．そらぁ．．．．．
Sora... Soraaa...

ああ お姉ちゃん大好きだよ
A-ah... Onee-chan, I love you so much!

SFX: くちゅっ
smooch

SFX: めるっ
slurp

二人とも．．．最高に素敵だったわ
The two of you... were absolutely wonderful.

こんなすばらしい死を見たのは初めてよ
I've never seen such a beautiful death.

待たせたわね空君
I kept you waiting, didn't I, Sora-kun?
(Sorry to have kept you waiting, Sora-kun)

お姉ちゃんといっしょに逝きなさい
Go together with your onee-chan.

ほんと言うとね綾香ちゃん
To tell the truth, Ayaka-chan
039

あなたには私の跡を継いでもらいたかったわ
I wanted you to take over as my successor.

あなたなら．．．
Because if it was you...

私を素敵に殺してくれると思ったから．．．
I thought you'd kill me beautifully...

For the afterword I gave the scanned page to DeepSeek. It OCRd it as I'll include below, which I can see is not 100% perfect: at a glance I've noticed that the sentence in the last paragraph that starts with 死にたい goes like 死にたい人々がためたく死ぬ話になっています in DeepSeek's reading, but actually says 死にたい人がめでたく死ぬ話になっています. But there's too much text for me to check it all.

解説

もともと「他殺志願1」はComicStudioという、デジタル漫画作成ソフトの練習をかねて描いてみた物です。それ以前にも4P程度の短編はいくつか描いていたのですが、まともに使えるようになるには、16P位の作品を一通り仕上げないといかんだろうと思って取り組みました。とはいえ、あくまで練習で、発表する予定もなかったので、脳みそを酷使するギャグや、難しい絡みのあるエロはパス。背景も面倒のないようにコンクリの何も無い部屋。ってな感じで出来上がったのがアレです。とはいえ、描いちゃうと発表したくなるもので、とりあえずインターネット上の掲示板に上げたりしたわけです。これを描いた時点で、続編の構想もできちゃったんですが、続編の「他殺志願2」は32P程度要りそうだったんで、すぐには取り掛かれませんでした。その後、ギロチン台にかかりながらオナニーして、イク瞬間に自分で手を離して斬首、というネタを思いついて、イラストを描こうと思ったんですが、一枚絵で描くにはシチュエーションが複雑だったので漫画の形にしてみたのが「ギロチンオナニー」です。漫画にするにあたって、弟を導入した結果、当初考えていた「他殺志願2」とネタがかぶってしまいましたが、まあいいやと、これもネットで公開しました。

で、これらの漫画の反響に僕はちょっと驚きました。「他殺志願」もふたば☆ちゃんねるでそこそこ受けたのですが、「ギロチンオナニー」は2chやらあちこちのblogでも取り上げられ、妙に盛り上がってしまいました。評価も賛否両論入り乱れていましたね。「こんな物描くやつは頭がどうかしてる」「タイホしろ」なんてまでありました。この二作品は、海外の画像掲示板などでも取り上げられて、いつの間にか英語版が作られていたりします。ちなみに「他殺志願」の英語タイトルは「Applicant for death」だそうです。

「他殺志願2」は、前述したような理由で、なかなか手をつけられずにいましたが、今回ようやく描く事ができました。当初お姉ちゃんが先生にスカウトされるまでの下りとか、お姉ちゃんが手伝った他の殺人とかも描こうかと思ったのですが、あまり長くなるのでカットしました。そのため、なおさら「ギロチンオナニー」に近くなってしまいましたが(汗)。

今回描きましたが、やっぱり先生も「死にたい人」なんですね。ただ、この人は自分が死んでしまったら、世の中の「死にたい人」を殺してあげられなくなるので死なないわけです。綾香ちゃんは自分を殺して、跡を継いでくれる人材としてスカウトしたのですが、こういうことになってしまいました。もうしばらく先生には頑張ってもらいましょう。

僕は葛藤が嫌いです。漫画家としてそれはどうかと思いますが、葛藤や後悔を描くのは好きではありません。そのため、この本に収録した漫画でも葛藤をなくして、死にたい人々がためたく死ぬ話になっています。そこには風刺も皮肉も含めてられていません。作品中では安易な死を否定も非難もせず、むしろ快楽や愛のための死を推奨しているようにすら見えるでしょう。しかし、人間として当たり前のことですが、僕はこのような死を賛美しているわけでも推奨しているわけでもありません。作品はあくまでフィクションであり、その作品世界の中でのみ、彼らは幸福なのです。決してこの本から何か意味のあることを読み取ろうとしないでください。これは純然たる非現実なのです。

Translation of that also by DeepSeek:

Afterword/Commentary

Originally, "Applicant for Death 1" was something I drew as practice for ComicStudio, a digital manga creation software. I had drawn a few short pieces of about 4 pages before that, but I thought that to really be able to use the software properly, I should complete a work of around 16 pages from start to finish, so I tackled it. That said, it was just practice, and I had no plans to publish it, so I skipped the brain-taxing gags and the difficult, intricate erotic scenes. For the background, I used a concrete room with nothing in it, so I wouldn't have to bother. That's how that thing came together. But once you draw something, you want to show it, so I uploaded it to an internet message board for the time being. By the time I finished drawing it, I already had an idea for a sequel, but "Applicant for Death 2" was going to need about 32 pages, so I couldn't start on it right away. After that, I came up with the idea of masturbating while positioned on a guillotine, and at the moment of orgasm, letting go with one's own hand to be decapitated. I thought about drawing it as an illustration, but the situation was too complex for a single picture, so I turned it into a manga — that's "Guillotine Masturbation." In turning it into a manga, I introduced a little brother, and as a result, the material overlapped with what I had originally planned for "Applicant for Death 2," but I figured it was fine and published it online as well.

Well, I was a bit surprised by the reaction to these manga. "Applicant for Death" did reasonably well on Futaba Channel, but "Guillotine Masturbation" got picked up on 2ch and various blogs, and caused a strangely big stir. The evaluations were a mix of pros and cons. Things like "Anyone who draws this kind of thing is messed up in the head" and "Arrest them" were scattered among the comments. These two works were also picked up on overseas image boards, and before I knew it, English versions had been made. By the way, the English title for "他殺志願" is apparently "Applicant for Death."

For "Applicant for Death 2", for the reasons I mentioned earlier, I couldn't bring myself to start it for quite a while, but this time I was finally able to draw it. At first, I thought about drawing the part before the older sister is scouted by the teacher, or the other murders the older sister helped with, but it would have gotten too long, so I cut it. Because of that, it ended up even closer to "Guillotine Masturbation" (😅).

I drew it this time, and sure enough, the teacher is also a "person who wants to die." However, if this person were to die, she wouldn't be able to kill the "people who want to die" in the world anymore, so she doesn't die. Ayaka was scouted as someone who would kill her and carry on her legacy, but it ended up like this. Let's have the teacher keep doing her best for a while longer.

I hate conflict. As a manga artist, I suppose that's questionable, but I don't like depicting conflict or regret. For that reason, even in the manga collected in this book, I removed conflict, and the stories are about people who want to die, dying as they wish. There is no satire or irony included in them. In the works, easy death is neither denied nor condemned — rather, it may even appear as though death for the sake of pleasure or love is being recommended. However, as a matter of course as a human being, I am neither praising nor recommending this kind of death. The works are strictly fiction, and only within that fictional world are they happy. Please never try to read any meaningful message from this book. This is pure unreality.

***

Note: when I first noticed the English phrase "Applicant for Death" appear in the afterword, I though it migth be the author's intended English translation, so I kept it, but apparently it's them noting that this is how the fans translated it. 他殺志願 consists of 他殺 meaning "murder, homicide or manslaughter", more specifially killing of another person (as opposed to, say, killing of oneself), and "志願" which can mean eithe "volunteering" or "wishing for". So it could be "volunteering for murder", or even "murder wish". It's different from just a death with, because it specifies being killed by another person, rathen than killing oneself.

Note 2: I so can relate to the last paragraph. I'm portraying death as good fun in my works not because I want anyone to suffer, but because I DON"T. Unfortunately, it's not possible to remove the suffering from the real world, but with the power of fiction I can create my own world so fundamentally kind and cozy that even the worst things become something good. But somehow wanting to create a world without suffering at least in fiction makes me seen as a monster who himself deserves all the possible sufferings in the world...