>>4287 I had another read through it to check for mistakes. Aside from spit/spot, the only typos I could find are that "crystalize" in paragraph 16 should be "crystallize" and that "piéce" in paragraph 17 should be "pièce".

Aside from that, there were only a couple of very minor grammatical issues, mostly regarding punctuation. It's nitpicking, really; I'm just a bit of a grammar Nazi. If you're interested, here's the list:

Paragraph 4: There shouldn't be a comma after "ago".

Paragraph 9:
>assistant. (Spike, who ... full-time.) She
should be
>assistant (Spike, who ... full-time). She

Paragraph 12: The comma after "stage" should be a colon.

Paragraph 15: "Is" shouldn't be capitalized, since the comma indicates it is a continuation of "That..."

Paragraph 16: The "If it had been possible" bit shouldn't be in parentheses, or it should be a continuation of the previous sentence.

Paragraph 19: There shouldn't be a comma after "do".

Paragraph 21: While I'm not entirely sure if "Liza finished the last of the cleaning of the bones themselves" is wrong, it sounds rather awkward. I'd suggest "Liza finished cleaning the bones themselves" or "Liza finished cleaning the last of the bones" instead.

Paragraph 26: I'd say it should be either "the next few who come in" or "the next ones who come in", not both.