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Quote: "Another fine chapter, although obviously I would have preferred more focus on the guro side of things."

Yeah, I know... like the note at the start said, it was supposed to focus more on the brain transplant, but character development and world-building took over.

Quote: "Cannibalism is fine too, but from a selfish point of view I'd like to see more of the harvesting."

Duly noted. (Maybe I'll slip in a few flashbacks that involve it next arc.) But keep in mind: cooking, cannibalism and vore are my main guro fetishes. It's part of why I have Twilight cooking the non-skin, non-organ meat that she takes from their bodies.

Quote: "If you're worried about being repetitive, just try to think of different approaches-think of new uses for different body parts, or as I suggested earlier, people being half-harvested, then being set free. It would also be fun to see the donated body parts being used, ala the dildo horn. Maybe Rarity can show up in a mare-leather dress, maybe with a purse to match."

Will keep that in mind, though I don't know about the half-harvesting part. And Rarity will be there in the next segment - she's one of the guests at the dinner party (as a diner, not food) Twilight and Derpy are having. (As for what the parts are used for... Rainbow Dash has a hat with Scootaloo's wings mounted on it, and will be wearing it when she shows up. It's a tribute to the one Scootaloo wore that looked like her idol's mane.)

Quote: "I'd also suggest less use of the paralysis spell, especially if the subject is consenting to whatever operation is being performed on them, and again to focus more on the victim/subject."

Rarity used the paralysis spell (or at least one to restrict movements) on Sweetie Belle back when she was harvested, so the parts she wanted intact wouldn't be accidentally damaged if Sweetie started twitching involuntarily during the surgery. Twilight uses it on willing patients (be they voluntary doners or just having their brains moved into a new body, as Derpy was) for the same reason. (And especially for those who would struggle, like Starlight.)

Quote: "Quick question-what is the skin from Derpy's old head being used for?"

Hadn't quite figured that out, actually. Twilight probably gave it to Rarity, like she does with the rest of the skins she harvests.

Quote: "Sex scene was short but sweet. You could maybe push the guro parts of the story into the sex parts."

Not entirely sure how to do that... Twilight prefers her bedroom for the actual sex part, then takes them to the lab for harvesting if they ask for it.

Quote: "I'll enjoy whatever you decide to put out though, really enjoying this. I'm strongly considered putting out more MLP guro myself actually, this story's put me back in that mindset."

Glad to hear it. The world can always use more pony guro.

Next part, currently in the writing phase: A little over six months after Derpy gets her new body, she, Twilight and the others cook the two literally mindless clones she'd ordered (plus a few more that Twilight set up so they'd have enough to feed everypony), which have finally finished growing. They're then served at a dinner party for the couple (plus their daughters) and their friends. I currently have plans for three of the five clones they eat - one will be deep-fried in the style of a Thanksgiving turkey, one will be stuffed and roasted in an oven like a turkey, and one will be spit-roasted. Still debating how to cook the other two.

Also, we learn how the other Element-bearers and a few others are doing, and what they've been up to in the past ten years. (Short version: most of them have gotten married and started families of their own. For instance, I mentioned that Coco Pommel "settled down with Rarity" in the previous segment, and Sunset Shimmer is married to Sonata Dusk.)