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>>4557
Yeah, more detail was basically what I was going for. There are many paragraphs describing the magic being used, the plans Twilight has, the conversations between the characters, backstory, worldbuilding ect, but I feel the guro parts are over very quickly. If you could add more guro and less exposition I think your story-which I'm still enjoying-could be even better.
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