>>4575
Quote: "Yeah, more detail was basically what I was going for. There are many paragraphs describing the magic being used, the plans Twilight has, the conversations between the characters, backstory, worldbuilding ect, but I feel the guro parts are over very quickly. If you could add more guro and less exposition I think your story-which I'm still enjoying-could be even better."

I'll see what I can do. But again, I don't want to be too repetitive when describing the details of the ponies being cut up. There are only so many ways you can describe somepony being skinned and having the organs cut from their body.

Have already done some slight revisions on "Scootaloo's Sacrifice", but I'm still trying to decide what to do with her skin.

What did you think of what I did with the mobile statue (animated by Starlight's eyes) and Scootaloo's bones, by the way?