Thanks for the comments and suggestions (especially Blackraven2 for that little short-it's not what will happen but that lot getting hit by a truck seems pretty in character. They mean well, but...)

Sidenote: Me and BR2 have been posting a lot of Ultra-Short stories recently. It's fun, and I highly recommend trying it. If there's anything there people here like let me know-could maybe even expand on them, or just incorporate them into my other stories.