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Anonymous asked for an alternate ending, not liking how the story ended:

Suddenly there was a bright glow in the corner of the room, near the ceiling, and the Anonymous Angel of Fair Endings appeared. She moved over Lacie, sprinkled some fairy dust over her, and in an instant the dead girl sat bolt upright. Her wounds disappeared, and she was in that instant whole again. The traumatized girl shook her head, climbed off the table and bending over, picked up the mallet. With a second sprinkling of fairy dust, it turned into a heavy sledge hammer. With a roar of anger she swung it at the side of Francine's head, and the force was so great it smashed right through, removing the upper 2/3 of Francine's skull, along with the explosively demolished contents.

The Anonymous Angel of Fair Endings positioned herself over the fallen nude fighter, spread her legs and urinated on the downed corpse. The crowd was delighted to see a second violent bitch-kill in the same evening, but were disappointed that one of the deaths had been snatched from them. They all grabbed whisky bottles from the crate of empties, smashed the ends off them, and pinning Lacie against the back wall, butchered the revitalized bitch with hundreds of angry slashes to her naked meat, all of them fatal blows. Now they were satisfied, and the gradually shrinking Angel, grinning at how things had worked out, disappeared into a pea-size beam against the wall that faded to nothing. It was done.
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