>>8816

Hm, well for the evil organisation idea, admittedly, I have no idea what Cyrus wants. While I did play the gameboy and early Nintendo ds games, I never really paid much attention to the evil guys and always skipped dialogue. So if it was out of character for Cyrus, how about one of the other organisations instead? Would there be any you could see being more sinister, after all, we'd have to keep in mind that the canon organisations have to be kept children and cartoon friendly, hence none of them would be too morbid with their show/game ideals.

And admittedly, Team Galactic was more of an example and placeholder for any evil faction, rather than me wanting the story to be opposite them in particular. So they definitely could be exchanged with some other organisation if that worked better. Like Team Rocket, Magma, Aqua or anybody else. Or even just some misc and original bad guy.

Essentially, for me, that plot-idea is more about the emotional element of Maylene getting overeager to do good and prove herself by defeating the bad guys as is her duty as gym leader, but getting in over her head and running into an untimely demise, filling her with regret. Whoever the bad guys are isn't all that important to me personally, so I'd also be happy to create a new faction altogether to make it more in-character. =)

As for the home invasion, let's keep this is mind I'd say, as long as you don't mind the brainstorming and discussion. Because admittedly, when setting a snuff story in a fandom universe I kind of like the immersion of making the snuff scene unique to that universe, like with those evil organisation, or something involving a trainer/deathbattle; rather than making it some generic scene like a home-invasion or 'regular real-life' murder scenario that could be copied into any other universe as well. Point being, while I do like the home-invasion idea still, or I wouldn't have suggested it (^.^), I really would like to see if we can't come up with something more pokemon-related still.

And speaking of deathmatches.

>>8814

I quite like that suggestion too actually, like a formal deathmatch challenge being issued one week in advance so both parties have time to make the necessary arrangements. Essentially I'd picture the pokemon universe identical to canon, with the difference being the option of formal deathmatches for gym and top4 challenges. To make it more realistic, it could even be a quite unpopular option to begin with that only very few, if any, trainers favor over regular battles. Especially considering a gym leaders' fame, prowess and reputation (fighting being their paid profession after all) most challengers don't want to take that risk and stake their live and dreams on one single battle. Hence the deathmatch option is practically never used.

With the protagonist in our story being a rare exception of course. Maybe he/she has a poor background whose life was rescued/spared due to his/her pokemon and to thank them he/she vowed to stake their life on every single battle and bring them to the top or die trying, or something along those lines?

Or maybe he/she is something like an adrenaline junkie instead.

So in that sense it might even be Maylene's first ever deathmatch and she's understandably nervous, which leads to her messing up under the overbearing pressure of the deathmatch, in turning making her die with regret, shame and guilt? Just tossing out some options regarding her potential state of mind during the execution.

And if it were a more humane method of death, then hanging or a decapitation could be on the table perhaps? Or maybe something like burning on a stake? (though not the most humane admittedly) Essentially just something medieval inspired. Or even something like her, after losing, refusing to accept the loss and trying to run away but being chased down and killed by him in place of the formal execution? Although yes, we certainly would be giving the pokemon world a considerably darker twist for that particular story.

Also, I apologize for the long response. It's just that I understand very well how difficult a story you can't relate to can be to write, hence I wanted to make sure to try and give a clearer picture of how those options might work. ^^