I have to agree with astro that the pacing is a little off because removing Rainbow Dash's brain isn't followed by something more extreme, resulting in a story that climaxes too soon (no pun intended) and a finale that feels a little uneventful. The first half is fun though, and well-written as usual.

Had a read through some of your other stories as well. 'Time Heals All Wounds, Sort Of' was quite enjoyable and 'Anatomy Lessons' was even better. Rarity's scene with the Diamond Dog was hilarious and I especially loved the sentence "She wiggles in your direction like an angry, sentient flan." I'll probably make my way through 'Modular Merchant' tomorrow.

While registering for furaffinity I also noticed the message you left me on hentai-foundry. As I mentioned in my reply, just let me know what communication method works best for you.

For astro: the link is http://www.furaffinity.net/user/pozzo/
Note that you'll need to make an account and adjust your maturity filter to see all of the stories.