>>11041

It is not how it feels, if the story is made well.

and in the good story character is newer established.



If I wrote this story I would start it with Melisa doing something like taking a pencil from her nipple as some magic trick. And when observers ask who does she do that she could also explain her condition with examples, that way explanation itself turns into the story which actually fun to read.

Reading all that stuff about her student debts and medical diagnosis is quite waste of time as it is not much related to the story.

So instead of putting that in front they would be better used as fillers later.