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While gurochan was down, I've looked for it at archive.org and found an older iteration of my thread there. Here are some old ideas I used to post there. Some are on Evangelion, others aren't.

IN NEED OF CARE



Rei is injured, having her arm broken, maybe a leg too, and Shinji does his best to help her in this situation. But finally her bones are healed, so she doesn't require that help anymore. But now that she experienced being cared of she can't forget it and she doesn't know another way of making people care for her. So she decides to make another injury to herself. Only it has to be something more permanent. She calls for Shinji and while he's on the way she takes a knife and cuts her eyes out. Shinji comes just after she've done, she hears the door open and Shinji coming it and faces him with bloody holes in place of her eyes. Then either it ends here, or has just a little of dialog like:
Rei: Will you take care of me?
Shinji: Rei... you're... you're... so beautiful! Of course I'll take care of you.
And a smile appears on Rei's eyeless face.

REASON TO FIGHT



Shinji and Rei's dialog before the operation Yashima. Shinji says: "you know, we may die there". Rei replies: "That would be nice". Shinji certainly didn't expect such an answer and asks what she means by that. Rei explains how she wants to die, but Commander doesn't let her die until all Angels are defeated. And shat's why she fights Angels - so that she would be allowed to die. Shinji doesn't realise what that actually means, he believes his father just ordered her not to die and she follows it because of her loyalty or just her sence of duty. However he is touched by her genuine longing for death. Shinji never strived for anything in his life, just went with the stream, and for him someone who has an actual dream and figths for it is admirable. So he ends up admiring Rei for her desire of death. Inspired by her sweet words of death he wants to help her and tells her that it's her own life and if she want her she can just go and end it, Commander doesn't have to listen to Commander. Rei answers sadly something like "you don't understand" or "it's not like that" and than the operation starts, so they don't have time to talk more about it.
The operation goes mostly like it did in the series. Or better like in the movie, that one was more epic. The difference is Shinji realises this is a chance to help Rei fulfill her dream, so he misses on purpose so that the Angel would fire back at him, which actually means at Rei because she's shielding him. Angel's first shot misses or stopped by the mountain, what it was? Anyway, Shinji purpousfully waits with his second shot to let the Angel shoot first this time. When if shoots, Shinji purpousfully keeps waiting as long as he can so that Rei would boil to death or at least be injured so badly she can't be healed and dies of injuries later. He only shoots when he sees Eva-00 is falling on the ground. The Angel is defeated and Shinji runs to Eva-00's entry plug to check on Rei. He hopes to see her dead or nearly dead. And indeed when he openes it he sees Rei injured so bad she's going to die any second now. She's still consious though and grateful (even if she knows she will be resurrected it's still nice to be dead for a while, and she appreciates his efforts too) but doesn't know how to express it and asks him. Shinji tells she should smile. So she does and dies with a grateful smile on his arms. Shinji cries of joy that he was able to help her.
A few days later though Rei "returns from the hospital" completely healed. Of course, astually she's resurrected into one of the clone bodies. Shinji is confused, he talks to her. He tells her he most certainly saw her dead, so why is she alive again? He feels guilty he couldn't be really of help. Rei has no choice but to reveal the truth that Commander can resurrect her into clone bodies even against her own will. That's what she meant when she told he doesn't let her die. She's still grateful to Shinji for his efforts and it was nice to be dead for a while, but for her to truly die there's no other way that to defeat all the Angels so that Commander would no longer need her. Shinji stops being a wimp, finding his reason to fight in fulfilling Rei's desire for death.

FOOD CHAIN



Basically, it's the concept of a fantasy world where three sentient races live: fairies, humans and dragons. Humans live in cities and villages, well, just like in real world. Fairies live in forests, but it's common to see them in human cities and villages too. Dragons live in caves in mountains, they are rarer seen in human settlements because they are big and don't quite fit the streets. All three races live in piece and know no discrimination. Nothing unusual in seeing a bunch of friends consisting of a both humans and fairies. Imagine them walking down the street having a lively discussion, humans walking on their feet and fairies flying around or sitting on humans' shoulders, all participating in a conversation as equals. Usually such a group would have 1-3 times as much fairies as humans, because there are much much more fairies in the world then humans, but most of the fairies live in forests. Dragones are welcome too, but there are less of them in the world and they rarer visit human settlements, so an average group won't have any.
Now you might ask: so what's with the food chain? Okay, here it is: humans eat fairies and dragons eat humans. And it's seen as casual. Say, when one goes to the forest, they usually don't bring food with them, because there are a lot of fairies in the forest. You just come to a fairy, take her and eat her. You don't even have to ask if she's okay with it because in this world there's no such thing as not being okay with being eaten. If there's no fairies within your reach just ask one to fly up to you. By the way, while fairies look like little humans (perhaps only girls?) with transparent wings, they are not made of flesh and blood. They are magical creatures and when you eat them they melt in your mouth and taste sweet. So, back to the sosciety. Remember that bunch of friends walking down the street and having the conversation? If one of the humans feels like having a snack they just take the nearest fairy and eat her, and the group just keeps walking and having their conversation. Or if you're not accompanied with any fairies, just take a random one from the street - there are always some of them around, maybe with another group of people, who also won't care when you eat a fairy from their group. The same casualness applies to dragons eating humans, though it happens rarer just because there are less dragons.
So, what do fairies eat? They might just eat normal food, only in small amounts according to their own size. And/or they may feed on the magical energy that fills the air. Maybe when a dragon dies they dissolve to that magical energy? That would make a closed ecosystem.
Actually about that... initially I was thinking of a world where humans don't solely feed on fairies and dragons don't solely feed on humans. But thinking of a closed ecosystem made me thing of another options: humans do eat only fairies and dragons do eat only humans. Without need to work to feed themselves there would be little for humans to do though expect uniting with nature, spititually develop, all that sort of things. Maybe turning deserts into gardens. So maybe it would be better to change them to elves. All the concept stays, just change the word "humans" to "elves". That would also help explain how they can feed on a magical energy (fairies) as they are also magical creatures.
As for what kind of story can be placed in such a world. What comes to mind is a story telling of a daily life of some random person (human/elf), they just live their life and during the course of the day eat fairies whenever they're hungry. Then a hungry dragon flyes by, sees that person and eats them as casually as they ate the fairies (or better eats their friend/lover on their eyes while having a casual cinversation with them).

ANGEL WORLD



It's also a world concept, rather than a story. This time a world populated by humans and angels (and mentioning of demons made me think they would better fit this world than one with fairies, though so far I don't see how to fit them). But let's start a little earlier...
Initially the only sentient species were humans, but there was also a higher power, which nature, be it a God, aliens from space or another dimension, is unknown and irrelevant. Seeing how humans' cruelty is their main problem that leads to crimes, wars and eventually could even destroy the mankind itself, the higher power figured out something had to be done with it. So it sent the angels to Earth. Angels are creatures of pure love and compassion (though really the word 'love' itself should imply compassion rather than passion, but given how it's understood today, I say 'love and compassion' to specify I mean compassionate love rather than passionate, so it doesn't mean 'passion and compassion' either). An angel would be happy to do anything to please you, be it clean up your room, suck your dick or die in a slow and agonizing way just for your amusement. The only thing it won't do is hurt other people. But most people won't want to risk hurting other people when they can freely hurt angels as much as they want. Basically, the idea behind the angels is that people would take out any cruelty they have on angels and there won't be left any for other people.
Angels look like cute young (say from 4 to 20 years old) girls with wings (not sure if they can fly) and halo (not sure if halo is needed, maybe just wings), but you probably can ask for a boy angel if that's what you prefer. Every person recieves an angel devoted to them at birth (so it's kinda like a guardian angel). It just appears from thin air knowing only utlimate love for everyone, but especially for it's master. It doesn't know what is the force that sent them to Earth and don't have any prior memories. Though they do know human language and how the sosciety works, much like Servants in F/SN gain that knowledge upon being summoned. If you kill your angel or it dies any other way, its body disappers and another one appears, you can probably choose what your new angel will look like (boy or girl, what age, what hair color...) You can't have more that one angel at a time, but if you want a dozen of angels servise you at the same time, just call for a dozen of friends with their angels, just don't forget to also share your angel when they are in need.

GODDESS OF SUFFERING



So, during the Third Impact Rei becomes a goddes... wait, was it a spoiler right now? c'mon, everyone saw NGE, right?.. so she becomes a goddes and asks her beloved Shinji what to do with the world. Shinji says the world must be cleaned of cruelty and violence. And Rei rebuilds a world that looks just like normal one does, only has one more rule to it. Whenever a situation arises where some person would normally use violence, another closed universe is created for just this person and Rei. There the person can take out any violence they have in mind on Rei. When they are calmed down, the closed universe is destroyed and the person and Rei return to the point in space and time where they were in the state they were (so no harm is done to Rei's main body). So in the main universe no time passed and no one noticed anything happened. The violent person doesn't remember it as well, only no longer feels any violent urges. Only Rei herself does remember every time, how every minute she's killed, every 10 seconds she's raped, every second she's beaten. This somehow doesn't affect her main memory though, so she won't forget what she was talking a second ago just because during that second she experienced a long death by crucifixion. But she does have to bare with all of that, which she is devoted to do because that's what kind of world Shinji wished for, and when she sees a random person on the street she can remember all the cruel things they did to her. She only smiles to that thought, knowing how taking that violence on herself means she saved the world from this violence occuring for real, hence made it the world Shinji wished for. She takes all of the violence of the world on herself just for the sake of Shinji liking the world. Shinji also lives in this world and is Rei's boyfriend and has no idea Rei is taking all the violence on herself. Rather than that just like the rest of the population he's not even aware that there is such a thing like violence (at least as long as it's about people hurting people, there are of course still wild animals who attack people and domestic aminals who are eaten by people) (and yes, his memories just like other peoples' are rewritten so that they think the world was always like that).
When the closed universe is created it represents the location where the violent person was at the moment, Rei being on the place of the person they were going to hurt. The violent person doesn't wonder why all the other people are gone or why the person they were going to hurt is replaced with Rei, thir violent ugres just get redirected at Rei. The closed universe bends to Rei's will and her will is to provide the violent person any means necessary to take out their violent urges, so if they want to use a knife and there's no knifes around, one just appears. Again the person doesn't wonder where it appeared from, much like in a dream. If they know Rei in the real world, they don't recognise her here. So even Shinji himself might be beating and raping and killing Rei from time to time without even knowing it.
What for Rei's own life, there are two options:
1) Rei grows older and eventually dies. The form that appears in the closed world won't change with time. What for when Rei dies, her soul reincarnates like it would normally do in a world with reincarnation. As a goddes she would also make it so that her and Shinji's souls always end up together after reincarnation, he might become her father if in the previous life he died earlier, or her son if the opposit was true, or her brother or her lover or at least best friend.
This way both her suffering and their happiness will last forever.
2) Rei becomes unaging immortal, so she can only be with Shinji in the beginning until people start to notice she doesn't age. Then she has to hide for the rest of the eternity, while continuing taking all of the violence of the world on herself. No reincarnation here, so both her happiness with Shinji and his happiness in this new world are limited. However Rei is still willing to suffer all of eternity even if that's just for that little happiness, cause there can't be to much of a price for beloved one's happiness.

REI AND THE KNIFE



Rei is training to coock, cutting some vegetables. She cuts her finger first accidentaly and finds only disturbin pain, second time accidentaly again, but she vaguely feels there's something else. She decides if she cuts herself next time she should listen to her feelings. It happens and she notices that the pain is somehow enjoyful. She is curious and cuts herself deliberately. She enjoys it more and more as she cuts herself more and deeper, hands, arms, body, fucking herself with the knife, and in the end finishes herself with cutting her throat. Happy end.

SHINJI'S HEART



Rei comes to Asuka and asks her to teach her how to cut out a heart of a human body. Asuka wonders why the hell the wondergirl needs it, but she's flattered that she was the one Rei asked for help, so she agrees to teach her. She asks Shinji to assist, which means he will be the one whose heart they will cut out. When they finish with it (Shinji obviously dies, but no one cares), Asuka asks Rei why she needed such a knowledge in the first place. Rei answers she was planning to cut out her own heart and give it to Shinji as a present on Valentine's Day. But since Shinji's now gone, it doesn't matter anymore. Rei thanks Asuka for wasting her time on her, casualy throws Shinji's heart to waste and goes home as if nothing special happened.

GUARDIAN ANGEL



Asuka has Shinji's baby and the moment they discover she's pregnant they offer Rei to become the child's guardian angel which she's glad to accept. All the way through Asuka's pregnancy Rei is around as a good freind, but finally when Asuka's giving birth, Rei is hanged. One option is for her to die the moment the child is born (kinda like the picture with Rei giving birth with a noose on her neck, only the one giving birth is Asuka). Another option is Rei while hanging holds the newborn child on her arms. Then she dies and her arms fall limp... only the baby doesn't fall as a half-transparent Rei's silhouette is still holding it. The idea behid this kind of rutial is for Rei to demonstrate a devotion to protecting the child that goes beyond life and death, and if she can demonstrate such a devotion, she becomes the child's guardian angel.

UNCERTAINTY



Rei is diagnosed with something that may or may not kill her in the near future (1 week or 1 month or 1 year), chances are roughly 50:50. Rei is totally broken by the uncertainty, she can't concentrate even on simple daily tasks as she finds herself constantly wondering if she will die or not and feels pressured by the uncertainty. She can't properly plan anything if she doesn't know if she's gonna die or not, where there's no plan there's no order, and Rei can't imagine her life without order.
So, Shinji, upon seeing Rei in such a state and after asking her what's the problem finds the solution. Rei doesn't really care if she lives or dies, she only needs it to be something certain. And while Shinji can't cure her, he can kill her and make her death certain. So he promices that if she doesn't die by the end of the week/month/year, he'll kill her with his own hands. Finally Rei doesn't have to worry if she dies or not, she knows for sure she will and it sets her at ease.
I'm not sure if the actual endind scene with Rei's death is needed. Finishing with Rei's certainty of her upcoming death might be better.

SPECIAL CONDITION



Okay, so I don't know how it works in Japan, but in Russia there are special conditions when you can marry before usual minimal legal age for it. Such conditions include having a child and having one of the newlyweds in mortal danger. Not sure if there are more and what they are, but the one really relevant to the idea is one about mortal danger, one about having a child might also come in handy. So I'll just have to assume Japanese laws have such special conditions too. Otherwise I guess I can just change Shinji and Rei for some Russian original characters, bot for now let's stick with Shinji and Rei.
So, the whole point is, Shinji and Rei want to marry and are too impatient to wait until legal age. So they study the law and find about those special conditions. One about having a baby won't work, because at least one of them believes in not having sex before marrige. So they decide to use another one and infect Rei (or both of them) with some mortal desise. So her/their life is now in danger and they can marry. It doesn't matter to them if she/they die soon, if they can be together for at least some time, they are happy enough with that. And they can also have sex now. Happy end.

WHAT IS DEATH?



This is actually a parody at a cliche that appers in many Evangelion fanfiction (and not only Eva, anything that has kudere girls) where Rei asks Shinji what is love. Here she asks what is death. Best way to teach her is to show, so Shinji asks Asuka to help with the demonstation. Which means either Asuka kills Shinji or Shinji kills Asuka, I'm not sure wich option is better here. Either way it's all casual, like "Hey, Asuka, Rei wants to know about death, can you kill me / I kill you to demonstrate?" and she's like "Sure, why not". So after someone dies, Rei is fascinated by seeing them dead and finds it quite appealing. So she asks whoever did the killing if they can do it to her two, and they kill her too.
Ah, the killings are most probably just by slapping their necks.

CAN YOU GIVE ME A HAND?


(or maybe better just GIVING A HAND)

Shinji has an erections in school and asks Rei to give him a hand. Rei wonders if he means right in the class. Shinji says "right, we should probably go to the infirmary for that". So they do and once there Rei cuts her hand off and gives it to Shinji. While she casually bandagees her stumo, in front of her Shinji as casually masturbates with her cut off hand notes how it is much better than with his own. Rei is glad she could be of help.
Another time Shinji asks her for a footjob and Rei cuts off her foot (or both).
Then he might want to put his dick in her pussy, so Rei cuts off her pussy.
Finally he wants to fuck her mouth and for that Rei's head is cut off.
Then either it ends with Rei's head becoming his favourite fuck-toy.
Or with time he gets used to it as he got used to hands, feet and pussy before, so he throws it away and decides that if cut-off parts aren't enought for him anymore, he should find a living girlfriend next.

> 'can you give me a hand' sounds really hot...although for the ending you could just have it that her parts are rotting and no one else he knows will cut themselves up so he decides to get a girlfriend.

Yeah, parts rotting is the part of why he needs something new. But speaking of Shinji's reason to get a living girlfriend, I guess it fits a casual story better when it's only because he's satisfied with cut off parts anymore, not because noone would cut themselves for him. As a matter of fact, they would probably be more willing to cut than to date him, cause when he uses a girl's part to masturbate, it doesn't count as having sex with her.

> Your idea is very erotic, but story loses its punch if you continue same pattern too much since you relieve tension to fast.

> I think you should reorder it somehow to do most amputations before those body parts are given. probably she could receive more than one request or it can be some other reasons, and in attempt to satisfy everyone she cuts herself into pieces. Finally everyone gets what they asked for just but not like they expected were story climaxes and as epilogue you can write what happens to her body parts and everything else.


Good point. Only about "not like they expected" point: in case you didn't get it, Rei cutting her parts off and giving to him was exactly what he asked for. I thought it was obvious from how casually he mastrbated with the hand and how he kept asking for more.
Now about who might want to ask what from Rei. Maybe Touji overheard their conversation before they left to the infirmary and asked for Rei's another hand. Then Kensuke asked to join too, but Rei said she doesn't have any more hands. Then Kensuke says her feet will do. Then... well.. there are no more named boys in their class. Go with random guys? Or maybe a male nurse in the infirmary upon seeing what they are doing asks to join and have Rei's pussy? Another option is to involve girls too. What they might want though? Hikari might want to have Rei's breast to cook them. If there's Mana, thinking of her reminds me of the pendant she gave to Shinji, so maybe she wants Rei's womb to make it into pendant and give it to Shinji. Finally for Asuka Rei's pussy is left I guess? Not sure why would she want it though. Or maybe Asuka takes Rei's intestines to make some king of adornment of them? And finally when everyone took what they wanted, what would be the reason for Shinji to also ask for Rei's head if her hand isn't rotten yet?
One more thing is how to have all that conversation so that it isn't clear they want the parts of Rei to be really cut off, before they arrive at the infirmary and do it. With not just a hand it might be tricky, but it seems if I manage to do it, it would make an awesome story.

> also cutting of head to fuck mouth is somehow illogical I think better reason is to cut head because remaining body with no limb s and pussy is not much useful at that time anyway. It is easier to take just head as fuck toy than everything else.

Okay, so let's say after people got all the parts of Rei they wanted to get it appeared she won't survive (and initially they didn't have intention to kill her, nor did they have intention not to kill her, they just took what they wanted, and the fact she got too damaged in the process is just a side effect), so they might as well treat her as if she's already dead, for example use as a fuck toy (cause they wouldn't have sex with a living girl without being in a relationship). Or they wait for her to die and then proclaim "Okay, she's dead, now we can finally fuck her!" So Shinji ends up cutting off the best part (the head) for himself and leaves the rest for his friends. I guess it makes sense as much as sense applies to a story like this.

> If you want to keep element of surprise and make it easier you may entirely ignore any explanations ,who asked what, besides Shinji asking for hand. Rei will just do everything for seemingly no reason leaving reader wonder why is she cutting her womb when Shinji asked for a hand and later everyone just come into infirmary to take what they requested.

> For example Kensuke enters infirmary and notices Rei cutting her breasts, so she asks if she can take pussy (which was cut earlier) and Rei says "yes, it is over there". this is also good opportunity to explain ho those body parts will be used and make another request.

I would also add some surprises, like teacher notices Rei ripping out her intestines and screams "Why are you ripping your intestines !!!" ... I told you I need them undamaged and you shredded them into pieces.

> As you described in your idea, it was unexpected, because we as readers expect that Shinji is asking for help not for a hand literally, and then it comes as surprise that it is literally a hand.

> If Shinji is not surprised this is also fine. It also works as story twist because readers expect that he should be surprised and that prediction fails because he actually wanted a hand and even asks for more.

Yes, the idea is that it's surprise for the reader, but not for Shinji and others who ask Rei for her body parts.

> If you want to keep element of surprise and make it easier you may entirely ignore any explanations ,who asked what, besides Shinji asking for hand. Rei will just do everything for seemingly no reason leaving reader wonder why is she cutting her womb when Shinji asked for a hand and later everyone just come into infirmary to take what they requested.

> For example Kensuke enters infirmary and notices Rei cutting her breasts, so she asks if she can take pussy (which was cut earlier) and Rei says "yes, it is over there". this is also good opportunity to explain ho those body parts will be used and make another request.

> I would also add some surprises, like teacher notices Rei ripping out her intestines and screams "Why are you ripping your intestines !!!" ... I told you I need them undamaged and you shredded them into pieces.

Hmm... maybe. Not sure yet. Maybe start with Shinji, Touji and Kensuke ask for hands and feet with reader thinking handjob and footjob are implied, then the next person would say something like "I want to take a part too, can I come with you?" and the others like "me too", "mee too", and then they all go to the infirmary. Rei cuts her hands and gives them to Shinji and Touji, then she cuts her feet (wait, she can't really cut herself without both hands, maybe the nurse does it? Or Rei only cuts off one hand and Touji is the one asking for pussy) and gives to Kensuke, then she asks the others what parts they wanted, they tell her, and she cuts those parts.

> This is also very interesting idea, You should mention it in your story as if Rei refuses to have sex with Shinji but has no objections to cut and give him pieces of herself. She may even complain about masturbation using her body parts.

No, speaking of Rei, she wouldn't mind dating Shinji or having him use her body parts to masturbate. Rather that that, Shinji's too shy to ask her to date him, so he decides just a hand is fine by him.
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