>>11449
Good version.
I would say you did it better than I. And better than before because now the story is pretty consistent and logical. unlike the first version where lost of things were lacking logic. Now it is even more sensible than most Hollywood movies LOL

However, you gave too little screen time for actual breast destruction, (while I neglected all that other stuff, just to get to the main part and make it as long as possible.)

By the way, the way she obtained the chemical was my first idea as well(as she bought it from someone who was actually overlord agent in disguise) but I replaced it with something shorter later.

Also, I doubt if in that kind of world they don't have some better experimental technology than implants or prosthetics, which also can fail in the very interesting ways as well. ; )