Always happy to see more non-lethal works. You say you're not a writer, but don't sell yourself short: that was a great first effort. The premise is original as well as interesting, and the whole thing is well-written. On the technical front there are some minor spelling and grammar issues here and there, but nothing that detracts from the story too much.

I'm certainly looking forward to reading more of your work. I don't suppose I could convince you to post your unpublished story as well?