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2018/02/11
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I really love your work and want to see more! Here are some suggestions in my opinion. First of all, I have noticed your stories are all about “meeting——battle——necro”, so I'm thinking maybe some aftermath stuffs will be great, too. For example, after a big war, there are many corpses left in the battle field and the winner can enjoy them——even can have some cannibal stuffs. And don't forget there can be execution of losers——even group execution, considering it may be a big war. Winners behead, hang, torture the losers——even take their heads home as trophies, just like game storymode. And the details of execution will be really fascinating.
Secondly, speaking of details, I think it will be better if you tell more details about your characters before you kill them. For example, a female warrior, you can tell her story first——how strong she is, how proud she is, how beautiful she is and how sexy she is. She is such a honored stunner but after the battle——bang——she becomes nothing but a hot, lifeless meat bag and winners can do everything on her. I find this contrast is really amazing. Besides, I think you can tell more details when you kill your characters——especially when you hang or behead them, like muscle and limbs twitching, changing of their expression, smell of their body or so.(I find eyes rolling up, bare feet and tongue really hot, btw) And don't forget the exhibition part, winners may exhibit losers' severed heads and nude bodies as warning sign to others.
Anyway, thank you for giving us such brilliant work! They are really good! I am a Forhonor fan too and I hope my suggestions can help you a little. Expecting more!(Especially peacekeeper and female warden, btw lol)
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