I liked this story, well written. I liked the end myself. It showed a very confused Julie, one who was not able to put her thoughts together, which I think was good. The only thing I might have done is cut out the part at the pool. I wasn't sure how that connected, but the mcdonalds part and the part at her home I thought were good. The swimming pool part was well written, just wasn't sure what purpose it served in the story. Good job though!