Yeah, to be honest I'm a little disappointed with how little description there is in the story. I wrote it way back in the late 2000s, when I was just experimenting (or trying to) with writing smut, so this is a very beginner type of story.

I tried to convey that the victim was kicking and struggling, while dying of her throat wound, but it didn't seem to come across as well.

I thank you kindly for your constructive comments and criticisms. Thank you.