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2018/09/29
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>>15208
It is pretty interesting that you managed to write something you not intended and it happens to be pretty good after all.
of course, nobody knows what was in your mind so we all come with our own interpretations
Not sure if you are interested in this discussion but if you don't mind I can try to explain my reasoning.
Maybe you had something else in mind, all you wrote is how Cupcake cares about his master and only thinks about his interest as even if master hurts him he only thinks if his mater feels good while hurting him He has no agenda of his own. you mentioned nothing about any fear of abandonment or any kind of discomfort or suffering it seems that he is pretty happy and will die happy regardless of all that abuse.
furthermore, your writing style itself makes fell as if everything is almost in the euphoria state with total satisfaction and peace of mind.
So yes, this is real unconditional love and it is not any kind of disorder.
I doubt if such a thing even exists in reality at all.
If you wanted to make it look like something dark you should have included something about his fears or other kind or terrible suffering which happens inside or show some contradiction between what is happening inside and outside. But then your story would be pretty sad.
Realistically if I saw such thing I would expect that this person has BPD or in anime terms he is yandere and all this may end badly for his master if he notices that there is a possibility of getting abandoned.
Again, I have no intent to complain or anything, just explained why I think so.
As for the names of the masters of those pets, giving them names is not necessary that good idea because we who read your story will need to learn those names ;). but if you want it then yes, you can just use random names.
p.s. strangely enough, I was doing RP with someone who has an extremely similar writing style and psychology, the topic was a bit different but the character was very similar.
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