Hello gentle readers.

I was hoping to solicit some feedback on the story so far. Apart from one kind comment, it feels like I'm flinging words into the void.

As I mentioned earlier, this is my first attempt at writing so any criticism would be gratefully received.

Is the pacing ok?
Character development?
Is the gore too strong? (If it's not strong enough I don't know what to tell you lol.)
Are there any part that you don't understand, or continuity errors.?

I'm writing this for myself, but it would be interesting to know what people think.

Finally if anyone has any ideas for characters, let me know. If you any of you ladies want to come to a grisly end, post your details and I'll see what I can do. (no promises).

I'll need:

A name (hopefully not your real one!)
Age
Height
Weight
Approximate statistics
Skin, hair and eye colour
Any other characteristics that you think are important.
Bob's a atickler for his diary entries, so if you leave something out, I'll just make something up.

You can choose a machine too, but again, I can't promise anything. Most likely you'll have to see what fate Bob and Emma have in mind for you.

Finally, I would like to apologise for the story actually having a plot. I did say that would be a 'minimal' plot, but this thing seems to have gained a life of it's own.