Story having no actual cooking in any shape of form is not my cup of tea, too, but otherwise your critique, if one can even call this critique, does not hold.

The story is a fan fiction. One does not write fan fiction with explanation of who, what and why. Reader either knows the original piece, or if he's interested, he going into wikis or else and becomes familiar enough with characters and setting. Countless fan fiction stories follow this rule, and this won't change just for you.

And while this type of story is not necessarily to my liking, hating just because it does not cater to you is immature. There are plenty of people who get off on exactly psychological aspects of stuff leading to actual guro and/or aftermath and don't care about the act itself. Who are you to decide if their fetishes are worth less than yours? There are plenty of stories on this and other sites that are way outside of my strike zone, like scat or gay, but you don't see me going around announcing they suck and that authors have to cater to my fetishes only. So do grow up and consider that world is not centered around you, please.

Great job as always, Visitor. Silent lurker here, but couldn't stay quiet with the anon here. Plenty of people appreciate your work, even if we don't always react to it.