>>16520
I haven't been posting much here because it's really annoying to write for hours working on something and then get no responses at all. Gurochan doesn't even give me a counter to see how many times the thread has been read so it kind of feels like shouting into the void. It's not a fun feeling.

Sorry this wasn't your cup of tea. If you want stories with more meat to them I've been posting them on Hentai-Foundry and other sites where I avctually get feedback. hxxp://www.hentai-foundry.com/stories/user/thevisitorblack/35851/Priyanka-Caught-Spying That one includes tentacle rape with boiling water tentacles. There's some others up there too that might be more your scene as well.


>>16504
There's plenty of description. I mention Marinette's blue hair, her petite frame, her small breasts, her clothes, her personality, her race, how her skin is smooth and soft. You don't need a mechanical descripts that she's 5 foot 4 or what have you. This is meant to be a short story focusing on physchological and not physical aspects of the fetish. Cutting down on purple prose is in aid of that. The fact that you didn't recognize the names isn't because the show is obscure (it's actually pretty popular and airs on major networks in the US and multiple streaming services) it's because you personally don't watch it. I tagged the show in the title for a reason. This was a story about characters from that show. If you chose not to look them up that's on you, not on me.

Now certainly there was no prep or actual snuff shown on screen. There was torture, but it was psychological and clearly that doesn't count for you. But I didn't say that there would be any torture. I tagged noncon, not torture. So that's not my fault either.

The fact that the most "action" in the story is a sex scene and then a scene of the aftermath is in fact on me. It's intentional. This story (and the other stories of the series that I haven't been posting to gurochan because I'm pretty sure no one's reading any of my work since they're definitely not commenting) are exercises in seeing how little I can write of that sort of thing and still have it recognizably work as a guro story. Clearly it didn't work for you, but again, that's your preferences, not because the story itself is bad. And I'm not obligated to write to cater to your fetishes. I'm not obligated to post here at all. I do so because I believe that there are people who enjoy reading my work (despite rarely ever commenting nowadays).

If you want extensive amounts of pain from the girl being cooked there are stories I wrote and posted here and elsewhere that you could of commented on. Hotaru's Greatest Gift, Miranda and Jack's Catfight, Ranma's Punishment, Amy Pond: Snuff-O-Gram. As far as I'm aware you didn't comment on any of them when I posted them. Why should I listen to you when you tell me that you didn't like this story when you don't tell me anything when you do like a story? Your opinion is expressed in a pretty rude and shitty manner, and the way you delivered it certainly doesn't make me want to alter my writing to do more stories you'd enjoy.