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>Thank you, i'm always looking for stories where a girl is being raped as she dies and it's surprisingly rare.

I feel your pain. For me, it was "hot girls getting mangled up in machinery is surprising rare," so I wrote my own. The closest thing I could find was probably "The Many Deaths of Julie" series. That guy writes much better than me, and I love the slow deaths of poor Julie.

>… that the writer often has a perfect version they're aware of but often can't put it into words. So the version they write is always being compared to that version inside their head.

Interesting, and no doubt true. I don't think I really suffer from that too much though, I don't recall a time where I can't get my thoughts across. But what I do find, is that I always think of more things I could have included after I've released a chapter.

But I'm continually re-writing the story, so the version on my hard disk has evolved a bit compared to this version. Basically, every time I read through it, I change something.

> However the reader doesn't know of that perfect version so they can only judge what is written down on the page.

Yes. I tell myself that, and it allows me to "push the button" and just get the damn story out, rather than pontificating endlessly on it's inadequacies.

>And in your case what you put down was an extremely hot and fun to read story.

Thanks! As I said before, really I'm just writing for myself, but if you enjoy it too, then I guess I'm doing something right.

>Also I have some other suggestions for girls but don't want to flood you with way too many suggestions.

Post them, if it makes you happy. At the moment I'm thinking I can't get enough. Too many machines, and also I want to raise the tempo before the end of the story. I think multiple girl deaths are hot. I don't think I should hold back on the splatter levels.

It's true I might not use them all, but go ahead. Your 'Cassy' character is a perfect example. I would never have thought up a girl like that, and it keeps things fresh and exciting for me.

Maybe I'm better at thinking up machines than characters…