>>17147
Your writing is good, you get to the point (if you excuse the pun) quickly, and the story has a nice erotic feel to it. In other words I got a boner reading it.

Your English isn't perfect, but it doesn't really detract from the story; it's perfectly understandable and your descriptions really conjure up a vivid scene.

For sure, I could make a number of corrections to your English. I don't have time right now, but I might email you later about that.