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Yes, I did mention the sudden change of tense and the pronoun / dialog tag thing in the email. Those things jumped out at me too. Ha! I even said the same thing about it being resolved in the context… I actually spent 2 hours going through the story line-by-line, so I probably gave more feedback than was strictly necessary. But it's a great little story, and I thought it was worth it.

BTW, when is Julie going to get dieded / demised again? I don't know if I mentioned it before, but you're one of my absolute favourite guro authors.