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2019/08/07
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>>17330
Loved this too, and it does remind me of Bloodlust's work.
I think the title is correct enough, though I would probably say "One Less Witch in the World." But I'm being picky again. Thinking about it more, it really should be "fewer", not "less", but that ruins the impact. And "One Fewer Witch" sounds wrong to me. Maybe someone with glasses who knows about "words and stuff" can help.
Harassment doesn't seem quite strong enough… Maybe Assault? Murder? Torture? Brutalization?
Anyway, those are minor considerations. The grammar is way better than your first story. Looking forward to more!
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