I like your stories but this one was a bit too much :) With all those superheroes I have no clue what is going on without pictures. especially in places that do not follow normal human anatomy :)
only after reading quite a lot I finally understood that it is about "the incredible's" but even if I watched that movie I already forgot character names. So i need to google all them.

It woud be good idea if you added some picture to your story to show what it is all about.

Maybe I will read it again some time later.