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Aoi Hikari
2019/08/20
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08:50:57
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Onix's story on /3dcg/ involving jumping from height reminded me of one of my own ideas.
Anna moves to the city
Apparently I've even wrote a bit on it, huh.
Anna sighed with relief as the lessons were finally over. Not that she hated school, in fact she took studying with proper responsibility and had always good grades. But for a lively ten year old having free time to dedicate to fun is as essential as air to breathe. So Anna collected her belongings to her school bag and headed home. The weather was nice and Anna walked slowly savouring the view. The actual path was shorter than when she went to school in her home village, but it felt like there was much more to explore in the big city. Which wasn’t actually big, but her family has moved here just a week ago and everything was still new to little Anna. The five-story apartment blocks ( see
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Khrushchyovka
) constituting most of the city seemed so big and occasional nine-story ones felt like skyscrapers. More people lived in one such building than on a village street, and on one city street there must have been more people than in the whole village. Everything was different, steel and concrete instead of wood and greenery, but different only means more interesting to explore. So Anna took her time to enjoy this overwhelming scenery on her way home.
Home was different too now. In was an apartment in one of those typical five-story blocks. Anna’s parents weren’t happy with their apartment being on the last fifth floor given the elevators were only in the nine-story ones, but they had to go with it for the sake of lower price. Anna, on the other hand, was excited about living so high at first. For an energetic little girl like her climbing the stairs wasn’t such a big of a deal, and she expected there should be a great view from there. Unfortunately, it turned out that the view was blocked by other equally tall buildings. Oh well, no reason to despair, maybe she can befriend someone from a nine-story building so she could try riding the elevator. She wondered what it was like.
Dealing with the stairs like it was a piece of playground equipment, Anna was now standing in front of a locked door. It was still an alien idea for Anna that if you don’t lock the door someone could just come and take your things. Why would anyone do such a thing? But apparently there are just too many people in the city so you can’t know them all well enough to trust them. So Anna took the keys from her bag, unlocked the door and locked it again after entering, like her parents have taught her.
…
I think I also wanted to include that she walked barefoot, but apparently didn't find a good chance to mention it organically? Oh well.
Anyway the idea is she comes home and casually strips nude, then opens a window and casually sits on the windowsill enjoying the breeze and carefreely dangling her legs outside. Her male classmate walks by and sees her, or maybe she sees him, anyway they try to talk, but she's so high they can't hear each other well and have to shout, so the girl decides to come down and without a second thought jumps off. As she lands she's all broken and bleeding, but still alive alright, the boy comes up and laughs as he asks what was that, and she laughs too saying how when she lived in the country she used to jump off the window like that all the time, so she did it out of habit, without thinking how now she was on the fifth floor. Also she still doesn't mind her nudity, as apparently back when she lived in the country she also didn't bother to dress up if she only left home for a little while and not far. And the boy doesn't mind it too because, well, I guess just because he's still a little child who doesn't care. And of course both see Anna's injuries as something to laugh at and not worry about because this is the world of my fantasy and this is how things work in it. It's also not something the find absolutely hilarious, but kinda like if someone was peeling an orange and absentmindedly thew away the orange instead of the peel, laugh it off and forget and get back to whatever they were doing.
Then it might go something like this:
1) the boy says he wanted to ask her if she would join him and other kids in a game of football (the one where you kick a ball with your feet, you know), but apparently now she wouldn't, so they laugh over it
2) an old lady passes by and scolds the girl for being naked in public (again not paying any attention to her injuries, they're not worth mentioning), the boy tells Anna to not mind her, those adults with their stupid rules
3) the girl tries to get home, so with all her broken limbs she crawls all the way to the fifth floor only to discover the door is locked and of course she doesn't have the keys on herself; everyone knew each other in the small village, so people didn't lock their doors, so even if she locked the door herself she only remembered it when she reached it; the parents would only come home from work in the evening, so it can't be helped, just waiting under the door would be boring, so she crawls all the way down again to go outside; maybe someone might pass her on the way and their only reaction would be to tell her to move from their way and she would politely do so
The story should probably end somewhere here to not get boring, but what I imagine happening next is:
4) to kill her time till the parents return she plays with the other kids outside, including the boy from earlier, whichever games she can possibly play in her state, or at least she can watch them play and talk to them
5) parents come, laugh when they learn what happened, help her get into the apartment and she finally starts doing homework because she has to go to school tomorrow, while her parents go look for a wheelchair to buy
6) next day she comes to school in a wheelchair, they laugh a bit at what happened, and they live happily ever after
7) oh, wait, there's no elevator, so how would she traverse five floors of stairs? I guess her parents might help her get down in the morning, but after school maybe that same boy would escort her home?
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