>>17878

Thaks, Loke, I was happy with it when I wrote it, so I posted it. Only afterwards did I start to have doubts. I must force myself to wait a couple of days before posting in future, and not be so impatient.

Totally agree with you about Lauren's rape. I noticed that when proof reading, and thought "oh I need to add to that," but somehow forgot, so you guys got stuck with a placeholder for the actual writing. Like the idea for her titties to get sliced off too.

Agree with you about everything TBH. What I find remarkable, is that this is the first negative critique the story has had. receiving it makes me strangely happy TBH, I was starting to think that people were just being too kind to tell me it sucked!