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First of all, nice dinosaur story. I love how she's such a badass that she manages to fight off actual dinosaurs for a while.

Also I'm glad I could spark some creativity for you! I had forgotten about the story where she goes on the lam… that one is also great, but I feel like the first bullet doesn't affect her too much and she gets several more before long in the story. I was picturing a single bullet (or stab) that really wears her down over time, getting more painful as she loses blood. You could play around with stuff like her drinking a beverage to quench her thirst, but being horrified to see some of the liquid leaking out of her. Or maybe throwing up blood, along with the bullet if it's still inside her. But it's obviously your story to go in any direction with :)

I'm happy to post more ideas as I think of them if you want. I have plenty of sadistic ideas but could probably never flesh out a full story as well as you haha
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