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Very nice! This chapter flows excellently! Detailed but not excessive descriptions and detail, rich but to the point language, and the pacing of the plot feels just right.

There are also an abundance of well put together lines and jokes that spices it all up a bit. My favorite from this chapter is
>Shapely calves were terminated with the standard number of feet

It's clear that a lot of hard work has been put into this; not only to write it in the first place but also in the editing. Well done, and thank you!
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