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>Trust me, I've read novels with significantly worse literary quality than this!

Now you mention it, I rather suspect I have too! :D

>All right, you might not be shortlisted for the Pulitzer or Booker, but your writing really does hold up rather well.

But I'm always dissatisfied.

Anyway, chapter 3 seems to be more better writed than the first two, so hopefully it won't need so much editing. It'll be much shorter than the old ch. 3, which was crazy long, so it'll continue thru ch. 4 and 5 if you see what I mean.