I have to agree, there's just some substance lacking. Like you read it and then go "uh-huh, and so what?" The idea is all good, just the way I like it, but the execution betrays how it's just some words randomly typed into a message box and not a properly written story.


And on the topic of non-fatal deaths, I remembered reading a collection of short stories just like that: with kids killing themselves for fun only to be somehow alive afterwards, only they were also furries. You can find it here: https://inkbunny.net/s/1845980 (you most probably have to create an account to read it).

(I wrote a whole lot more here, but then decided I better move it to my own thread)