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>>14459
Obviously you don't need to explain opinions all I am asking is just to tell if they like what is going on and what they feel. Like was it even painfull at all or they just sat on those things like on the simple chairs thinking if boredom will kill them before they fall off?
>Really, Maia's motivations are right there in the text: she wants to indulge her little sister, and it feels like a challenge. Vikki is being a little kid thinking it's awesome and refusing to back down, there isn't much to it.
This is good enough, but you did not describe that in the text that well as here. For me it felt that Maia was quite upset or indifferent.
Or did you really meant that this ride was boring for Maia and fun for Vicki?
>Your real question is "why are they so casual about it that these motivations are enough" but the answer to that is "because it's a guro porn story".
No, that is not my "real question"
When talking about motivation I mean what is the point of those rides? like cause pain or to be scary or try to kill you making you think if you will survive or not? since you don't tell what they feel it remains unclear what it was for.
It is not even about guro or death as that is supposed to be casual and irrelevant. Your plot is good enough too.
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