>Ending feels a bit weak but I didn't really know where else to go with it

You followed a pretty set framework with this story, so the ending might not be huge twist or anything but it was satisfying nonetheless. For sure a nice debut! You can always change things up in the future.

I especially like the explicitly sexual things that happen in this story. Edward's stories were sometimes a little tame for me, but here there's plenty of action. Really nice work!