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That's all fine and good if characters are different just there could be more focus on that. Now they are all *almost* same besides Chloe who started to object unlike others.
There could be more different girls with different behaviors like someone who is very sensitive, someone with high pain tolerance or someone very masochistic who wants to suffer as much as possible. Depressive, happy, angry, smart, stupid etc
this way pretty complex story could be made by playing on those differences.
Like if we have masochistic girl observing other girl who is screaming in pain while being cooked she gets excited and envies her wishing to be in her place. :) saying how lucky is her friend to suffer so much.
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