>>16417


Damn, that was a hell of a read. Overall the story was fantastic. The only 2 points of criticism I have are:

-I feel like the story didn't really need the torture scene of the cook Damon. It didn't really add anything and could have resolved with "we took him out back and shot him twice in the back of the head".


-This is just my personal taste but when the girls are beheaded or have their throats cut, more details into how their bodies react (convulsions, orgasims, involuntarily movements, death spasms and so on. Lokes stories are perfect example). The girls deaths are the "money shots" and in my opinion, should have the most detail. But that's just my personal taste.


Tell Ed that he has done another fantastic job!