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This is great! You should separate lines of dialog from different characters, though.

"Hi Bob," Sally said.

"Hi Sally," Bob replied.

As opposed to:

"Hi Bob," Sally said. "Hi Sally," Bob replied.

Makes it easier to read, and it's the usual way dialog is formatted.
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