Shit, never thought I'd be turned on by a concept like this. Very nicely written.

A few lines of dialog were kinda awkward, maybe aiming more to be hot than to be something characters would say. Like "Ella loves you so much. She trusts you. She wants to live, but you want her to die." Hot (so weird that this is hot to me), but it sounds a little awkward when a character actually says it. I think you'd have to set up more of a dynamic between the characters for that line to land.