>>24767
Well, as you can see, I didn't. It might be obvious for you as the author because that's how you're imagining it in your head, but for the reader to imagine the same thing it has to be there in the text.

I dunno, maybe it's just me, but for me emotions are a crucial part of guro, specifically consensual and casual guro. It's about the contrast between the horrible things happening and how positively - or sometimes negligently - the characters feel about them. So if the story fails to convey such feelings, then only description of physical suffering remains. And then what's to set it apart from non-consensual guro? I mean, yeah, she did give her consent earlier in the story, but once the actual guro is happening… it's like the story forgets it's following Riley's perspective, but it doesn't adopt the guy's perspective either, and so loses perspective altogether. You said yourself, it's more of an obligation to finish, and that's exactly what it feels like reading, which is not a good thing.

As for the following stories, they're fine. They don't have moments as hot as "someone has to die for my satisfaction, and it might as well be me", but without setting high expectations they also don't fail to deliver on them.