>>24745
>Like to me when she took off the ribbon she transitioned the focus to the guy's desires. Like he wasn't trying to fulfill her fantasies or give her what she needs, he was satisfying himself using her, which is exactly what she wanted / consented to by taking off the ribbon with him staring at her like that, which is the hot part to me (well, A hot part). The hanging was what he needed, not she, and saying anything about HER desires and needs at that point would be out of place. If that makes sense?


By this i will assume that you are a woman. because this is the typical fetish of women, pretty much with no exception so far :)
To me this is not that much appealing as I don't see any reason why that guy should be interested in making effort to rape or hang her it is more appealing to women who associate themselves with that girl and imagine how some guy is giving them lots of attention and being very interested in them like into an object.
if I was in that situation seeing a girl to whom I can do anything I want I would just not be interested in doing anything.
But I a not telling you to change your preferences and I suspect that lots of female readers will like this.

maybe one thing which I could suggest is to make story more ambiguous where readers can imagine different scenarios according to their own tastes and do not push your own interpretation very hard if someone wants to see it in another way but rather help them to see the story in the wasy they want to see it.


>>24776
>Compare it to the nuance of writing emotionless characters.
So finally you admit what you were so much arguing against when i was saying it. that your characters are emotionless

But while you complain to L I will say that your attempts do not work at all either your emotionless characters is exactly like pointless nudist video where if characters fell nothing then reader feels nothing either.
L stories look a bit more rational as at least somebody has some kind of motivation there rather than just random people doing completely random meaningless things that they do not even enjoy and do not want to do.


>>24782
I think L explained it that the whole point of the story is not death but rather the idea that some guy is very strongly interested into a girl and want something from her like from an object
the girl is pretty much goddess who is being worshiped here. How exactly he shows his interest, does not matter that much. It is also not that Riley's feelings don't matter but rather that the guy is very interested in her not that she is interested in him. she doesn't care about that guy at all, he is absolutely worthless for her. she just wants to be wanted


this is in contrast to my stories where girl is pretty much begging her brother to give her some attention all the time when he is largely lacking any interest in her.