>>25292

Thanks for the feedback.

No, I didn't use AI.
It might just be my writing style that feels a bit weird, I don't know.

What part of the story did you have trouble following ? I guess it might be because I chose to narrate everything from the girls' perspective, and because they go from shock to shock, always surprised by the increasing brutality of the officers, I kinda take you along with that sentiment.

I could have written partially from the officer's perspective and described his thought process, but somehow I kinda think it would have taken away from the shock value and from the violence of what they're going. Wouldn't it ?

It could also just be it's my first long form story, so I don't yet have the experience. I'll try to keep that in mind, definitely.

As for the next part, it will be about Emi's interrogation. So in a sense it's consensual. I mean, she did choose to put herself in this situation… But that doesn't mean she won't regret it…