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Aoi Hikari
2025/09/24
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Phew, finally caught up with it!
What can I say, the bittersweet tone is a bit too bitter for my taste, but overall the story is pretty good and I enjoyed it alright.
Now, for nitpicking...
> Rhona is the friend Becky mentioned. Pam was Rhona's sister and Alex is the brother, who showed her what the head is good for. ;)
This line:
"At Rhona's house." The little girl shrugged. "A few years ago, her family barbecued her at a party. And her head has been sitting by her parents."
Reads like it's Rhona who was barbecued and made into an onahead.
> "That's no mean feat. After all, I'm your only sister."
That's a good ending, but one line short from being perfect. It should have just one more line going like this:
"True", bobby agreed, and the two of them laughed in unison under Sam's content gaze.
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