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An interesting and entertaining read! Feedback-wise the only suggestion I would really give is to make it clearer why the mum is so angry - is she jealous? Sick of her daughter bragging about her tits? As it stands, it just comes off like she thinks having big tits is something that must be punished but it would be more satisfying to know why!

Also, just personal "taste" here, but why explode them when they could be cut off, sliced and fried in garlic butter? ;)
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