>>29216

> To the right of the bed itself was a sort of lounge area with an L-shaped sofa which hugged the corner and a low coffee table.
​ ​ ​ ​ ​ ​ ​ ​ Confusion: hugged the corner and a low coffee table ‒ The sofa only hugged the corner, but not the coffee table. :P
​To the right of the bed itself was a sort of lounge area with a low coffee table and an L-shaped sofa which hugged the corner.

> At first, Amelia thought that the fabric hanging along both walls behind the sofa was just for decoration but then she saw the button on the wall and realised that it was curtains!
​ ​ ​ ​ ​ ​ ​ ​ Confusion: The fabric is of course singular and "was" would be without doubt correct in "and realised that it was a curtain". But the "curtains" are plural and the new subject, so shouldn't change the verb to "were" ‒ "and realised that it were curtains"?

> “You know,” She stroked his face, “this almost feels like a honeymoon sweet.”
​ ​ ​ ​ ​ ​ ​ ​ Typo: “You know,” she stroked his face
​“You know,” she stroked his face, “this almost feels like a honeymoon sweet.”

> “Well, tonight,” she kissed her tenderly and lovingly on the lips, “you can be my bride!”
​ ​ ​ ​ ​ ​ ​ ​ Typo: tonight,” she kissed her
​“Well, tonight,” he kissed her tenderly and lovingly on the lips, “you can be my bride!”
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> They ducked down a quiet side-street which seemed to be mostly the back doors or shops and restaurants, where deliveries were made and bins were kept, getting off the busy city high street to make conversation easier then Amelia called her mum back.
​ ​ ​ ​ ​ ​ ​ ​ Typo: the back doors of shops and restaurants
They ducked down a quiet side-street which seemed to be mostly the back doors or shops and restaurants, where deliveries were made and bins were kept, getting off the busy city high street to make conversation easier then Amelia called her mum back.


> It was Tuesday the twenty sixth of December, 2034, (>>29125)
> “They’ve set a date for the Christening! Sunday, fourth of May!”
​ ​ ​ ​ ​ ​ ​ ​ Logical: The story starts in 2034. So the next fourth of May would be in 2035 and a Friday. In 2035 are three sunday the fourth: in February, March and November. To keep the story consistent the closest date is ​Sunday, fourth of March.
“They’ve set a date for the Christening! Sunday, fourth of March!”

> “On that day, you’ll get to watch me roast then get to to enjoy a slice or two of my juicy rump! I know you’re looking forward to that!”
​ ​ ​ ​ ​ ​ ​ ​ Doubling: then get to to enjoy a slice
“On that day, you’ll get to watch me roast then get to to enjoy a slice or two of my juicy rump! I know you’re looking forward to that!”

> While not as well-known a custom as in America, Daddy/Daughter dates, where a man takes his young daughter out for a meal to help her learn how she should expect a gentleman to treat her, were no unknown in Britain, especially in a big, cosmopolitan city.
​ ​ ​ ​ ​ ​ ​ ​ Typo: were not unknown in Britain
While not as well-known a custom as in America, Daddy/Daughter dates, where a man takes his young daughter out for a meal to help her learn how she should expect a gentleman to treat her, were no unknown in Britain, especially in a big, cosmopolitan city.

> It certainly did not seem to type to be printed every day to keep up with the specials.
​ ​ ​ ​ ​ ​ ​ ​ Typo(?): did not seem the type to be printed
It certainly did not seem the type to be printed every day to keep up with the specials.

> “Laura said you watch the original Phantom of the Opera with Sam?” Josh asked conversationally.
​ ​ ​ ​ ​ ​ ​ ​ Typo(?): you watched the original ‒ real error or another type of "wanted"?
“Laura said you watched the original Phantom of the Opera with Sam?” Josh asked conversationally.

> To be continued...
​ ​ ​ ​ ​ ​ ​ ​ Editing-remains: This line needs to be moved to the end of the chapter.

> Something about the rhythm of the music itself gave the impression of sex and, although the two fully clothed performers were simply stood facing each other, fully clothed, the scene was incredibly erotic!
​ ​ ​ ​ ​ ​ ​ ​ Doubling(?): although the two fully clothed performers were simply stood facing each other, fully clothed, the scene was
Something about the rhythm of the music itself gave the impression of sex and, although the two performers were simply stood facing each other, fully clothed, the scene was incredibly erotic!