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Okay I am up to date with the story so far! Very well-written! I am not normally a fan of present tense but you made it work and kept it consistent throughout to the point I really stopped noticing.

Your style/atmosphere reminds me a lot of Pixelwriter - it's a shame he's taking a sabbatical at the moment as I think the two of you would get along very well!

Despite what I said before, I really don't mind "Oh shit! Guess I'm meat!" type situations, I do enjoy Splyf's stories and I enjoyed Riley's experiences at school etc. I'm afraid I had to skip once she started crying and saying she didn't want to die - I'm afraid such scenes can be enough to make me swear off the fetish (for a while at least! Hehe) but I assume that was meant as a "reality sinks in" moment and she'll be more philosophical from now on? I really did love the examples of kindness from strangers. Hoping for some comeuppance for the school bully - drafted for a cooking class maybe?

Anyway, great start to the story and I look forward to the continuation! 😁
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