I like the way you think, troubledmind. 😍

You have some delightful ideas, which you described to us in clear pleasant exposition. I enjoyed seeing all the ways you envision this 'happy ending' drug could be experienced. However, I think your story would benefit from more story about what happened here and now (aka 'show'), and less descriptions of other things which aren't events currently happening to the characters in this scene (aka 'tell'). I completely understand that some amount of backstory, or explaining how this imaginary world works is often needed to keep the readers from getting lost or confused, but you should try not to put all of it in one place: the story itself should be the main focus, and these explanations are best to be brought in in small, individual sized doses 😉. I think many of these little descriptions of the different commercials could have been kept for later, perhaps even to be expanded into their own story 💖. My advice would be to take a breath, and accept that you can't get every aspect of your idea out at the same time: allow the details to work into the fabric of an entire story, rather than using them all up at the start.

I hope that didn't sound too negative or discouraging. I'm only taking the time to point out ways you can get better because I really love what you've done so far. Really, this was a wonderful start, and I'll be eagerly waiting to see what else your mind has tucked away, asking to be shared.

Let's see some cute angels get their halos 😘😇