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    Superhero Rivalry


    "Now that you're officially a member of the team, it's time for me to show you our secret weapon," said Novahawk with a little smirk, her glowing green eyes wandering up and down Hyperbunny's athletic body.

    "Huh? We've got a secret weapon?"

    Hyperbunny hopped up from the couch with a big grin. She was 18 years old, bouncy and perky, always smiling, with long blond hair and perfect skin, and her costume included long ears that would often flop down in front of her face. Her costume was both backless and strapless, the fuzzy white bullet-proof fabric held to her large breasts and flat belly by specially designed adhesive. The suit stretched to give her total freedom of movement and make her breasts very bouncy. It wrapped around to cover her firm butt with a fuzzy ball to represent a bunny tail. Bare legs showed off her powerfully muscular thighs, and a low cut revealed the tops of her breasts and most of her cleavage.

    "That's right. Let's go down to the vault and I'll show you."

    Novahawk was the leader of the team, 35 years old with sharply defined features and short brown hair. She wore a slim jetpack on her back with mechanical wings that folded neatly away when not in use. Her costume was twin strips of tough red fabric that looped over her shoulders and under her crotch, connecting to her jetpack in the back and tied together by a zigzag of lacing down her front. The lacing was loose enough to give a wide window into her cleavage. Her breasts were by far the largest on the team before Hyperbunny arrived. Novahawk's flawless orbs were firm and athletic, held tightly in place by her costume without a trace of bounce.

    "Say, Novahawk, you're not jealous because I'm stronger and faster than you, right?" Hyperbunny frowned and fidgetted with one of her fuzzy rabbit ears.


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    >>11457
    > Attacking teammate in so horrible way was too dumb because how she will explain that to her team?

    I seriously considered having Bunny ask about that and thereby giving Novahawk a chance to explain her evil scheme, but when writing the story there never seemed to be a good moment for it. Novahawk was going to lie to the team about what happened, and she expected to be believed. She'd intimidate Bunny into confirming the story under threat of losing her powers.

    > I had no time but I had some interesting ideas how bunny was going to lose her breasts in the hard way.

    I look forward to it.

    > Your ending is somewhat disappointing because it ruins all expectations.

    What expectations do you mean?


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    Let's continue with the surgery to remove Hyperbunny's breasts.


    A small curtain blocked Hyperbunny's view of her own breasts during the procedure. She might have lost her mind if she had to watch the knife slicing through her flesh, but she had an excellent view of the tray where her flesh was being discarded. An especially large chunk of white fat plopped onto the tray to jiggle in front of Hyperbunny's eyes. It had a square of her flawless smooth skin still attached.

    "Doctor, I... I think you're taking too much," she stammered weakly, "If... If it goes on like this, I won't have any breasts left!"

    "I'm sorry, but I have to do what is necessary to keep you from exploding."

    "But... But you promised I'd get to keep some breasts!" Bunny sniffled and trembled, breathing faster, her heart racing.

    "I don't control what needs to be removed. Please don't move. If we don't remove all the toxin, it will just spread again. You're lucky your breasts were so large, or else the toxin would have filled your breasts completely the way it did for Novahawk."

    Hyperbunny bit her lip as she watched another huge chunk of fat plop onto the tray.

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    >>11458
    She'd intimidate Bunny into confirming the story under threat of losing her powers.

    This would not work because Hawk cant use the gun in front of all team
    also how they are supposed to work together from that time?

    >>What expectations do you mean?
    I already explained that. We all may have some ideas what will happen next but you limit those options without any need.

    >>I look forward to it.

    Not sure when I will be able to do that since writing stories take lots of time.


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    >>11460
    > This would not work because Hawk cant use the gun in front of all team.

    One does not need to be holding a gun to use a gun to intimidate someone. Just threatening to get the gun later can be enough. In Novahawk's mind, Bunny was going to be cowardly and stupid and do everything she was told just to avoid any risk of being shot. This is how organized crime stops people from talking to the police without having to continuously hold a gun against everyone's back.

    > How they are supposed to work together from that time?

    Novahawk wanted Bunny to leave the team, so Novahawk was planning to make their working relationship as terrible as possible. She never expected Bunny to stay after being threatened and losing her breasts.

    We never got to see how Novahawk imagined the whole encounter going because it all went terribly wrong for her. It might be a fun story to write, but unfortunately I will be too busy to write for a few days. Perhaps later.
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    >>11463
    In this situation threats to do it later will not work, because if the team believed Bunny's words, that's game over for Nowahawk she will not be able to use that gun anymore ever.
    And unless Bunny is totally brainless she will know that.
    If Nowahawk wanted to kick her out it would make more sense just to tell her to leave while threatening to use that gun if she refuses.

    there is no reasonable situation possible how that plan could work
    Of course this does not matter in this kind of story since nothing what superheroes do makes any sense anyway LOL

    Long story short: I wrote this for another, Touhou focused site. While they may be able to speak of writing quality, the important thing is whether the story is hot if you're into girls stabbing other girls. I have no idea if it is. And so I cross-post here, where I can more likely garner such opinions. I'm not wholly sure it isn't a little tame for the site on average, but, it's the first place to come to mind for something bloody. So, enjoy, hopefully.

    ...


    With a crack, the red-skinned oni's face snaps backwards as a massive, muscled arm smashes a fist into it; the rest of his body soon follows, hurtling through the air and tumbling along the ground several dozen yards to crash against the wall of a nearby building, leaving cracks upon it as he lays there unconscious. A girl of silver, braided hair, clad in maid uniform, stoops to observe the unconscious oni suddenly blocking her path. Yuugi, meanwhile, sighs and dusts off her knuckles as the ring of spectators cheer and an energetic male voice nearby calls out, “And that's twenty nine in a row! Even three on one, the Oni of Oni cannot be stopped! Will anyone even come forth to challenge her after that one?!”

    Yuugi takes the large gourd of sake in her other hand and upends it, pouring copious amounts of alcohol straight down her throat. She mutters to herself, “Goddamn weaklings. Shit's fuckin' boring.” She hasn't had a good scrap in who knows how long, and this little fight club doesn't help. Looking around the crowd, it seemed the announcer was right; no one else wanted to step forward this evening, they'd gotten their fun. There was, however, the maid clinically examining the guy who'd been knocked unconscious upon her path. That silver, it was familiar... ah, yes, wasn't that the head maid of that vampire mansion? Actually, hold on. She was supposed to be lightning quick. Maybe if Yuugi actually had to work to punch someone... As Sakuya stands up, no longer enamored by the effects of Yuugi's blow upon the man, the large oni calls out, “Oi! Dog of the Scarlet Devil, was it?”

    Sakuya hardly has the time to take a single stride before freezing once more, turning to regard Yuugi through the gap in the audience. “Do you require something from me?” she asks, rather coldly. “I'm on important business for the Mistress, so if it's nothing urgent-”

    “Come into the ring,” Yuugi all but demands, polishing off her drink. “You're damn fast, right? I need someone I can't hit so easy. Why don't we go for a while? You can even use your knives, I don't care. Probably can't even cut me.” It's a very dismissive tone she takes in calling out the chief maid, all but outright stating the only thing Sakuya's good for is scrambling for her life.


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    >>11369
    Please write more stories about hot girls stabbing other girls
    10/10
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    got a bit too wordy at the end but that was a fucking hot story
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    >>11430
    Unfortunately, I'll have to disappoint, as I've no such plans. I am trying to work on writing something else that will likely end up here, but it will not have a stabbing focus. I am also slow as fuck, so it's not gonna show up any time soon.

    >>11434
    Long paragraphs is a thing I've certainly heard, and I might try and work on that for anything else I do. Likely I'll not learn brevity in any short order, though.
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    >>11443
    Oh I didn't mean it was too long, just unnecessarily convoluted sentences and unfitting word choice that seemed like thesaurus overuse.

    Long time lurker, first time storyteller. All stories here take place in what I'm tentatively calling the Frumpverse, as all stories here adhere to the same ruleset through wildy different universes and settings.
    My Arrowverse stories are by far the most detailed and give the most info, si I'll start with them.

    While I'm pretty sure I don't actually have to say this but I will anyways just in case. I think it'll become pretty clear where I stand on a certain politician, but don't care to discFuss it, so if you don't have anything to say about my stories, it would be best if you said nothing.

    And without further adieu...
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    That's a good start.
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    Getting tired of all this plot? Well luckily for you, there's actually some porn in this one!


    Seeing Oliver on the tv and seeing him walk into CNRI was something else. She supposed there was no avoiding this but it was awkward all the same.

    “Hi Laurel,” he said quietly when she got close enough.

    “Oliver,” she replied in kind.

    “Is there somewhere we could talk?”

    Laurel nodded, leading him to the conference room. “How’ve you been?”


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    Awsome! I love stories with legal female slavery
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    Seems promising so far, can't wait to see what you'll come up with.
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    Seems someone's stealing my name...

    That's okay. This is pretty good so far.

    Korra For Breakfast
    Tags: F/F, Cooking, Cannibalism, Non-Fatal, Romantic.

    This story is (loosely) based off an edit I did a while back (https://www.gurochan.cx/g/src/1433907141292.png).

    Posting this in its own thread because posting newly completed stories in a giant thread for people to enjoy is apparently a terrible idea that people hate (since it has rendered absolutely no feedback whatsoever).

    Anyway, Enjoy.




    "What's the most delicious thing you've ever tasted?" Korra asked her girlfriend as they relaxed together on the couch in front of the roaring fire.


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    So, I've been writing a sequel. I'm going to try and finish it as quickly as I can, and I have another sequel after this one planned that'll end this trilogy.

    _____

    Making Korra Brunch
    Tags: F/F/F, Snuff, Consensual, Cannibalism

    Asami had a problem. Korra had given her such an amazing gift for her birthday, sacrificing so much just to make her happy, and now with Korra's own birthday less than a week away, Asami was completely stumped what to get her girlfriend. She wanted to give Korra a sense of what she'd given her, she wanted to show Korra what it felt like for someone to sacrifice so much just so that you can enjoy a single wonderful meal. But Korra had categorically forbidden her from cooking any part of herself; saying that she loved Asami just the way she was, with all her bits attached. It was sweet, but it left Asami in a bit of a lurch idea-wise. Not that she had planned to cook herself, but it was a possibility. The only one Asami had thought of that could convey how what Korra did for her meant to her.

    With one week remaining until the big day, Asami was actually getting sort of frantic about it.

    Then, without any warning, Asami saw her at a rally raise funds to help rebuild Republic City.


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    I guess Yumi must have been quite surprised to see her idol without nipples or labia. :p

    Really nice story ! I can't wait for the next part. :)
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    >>10794
    You're in Luck. here's the whole thing:

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    Making Korra Brunch
    Tags: F/F/F, Snuff, Consensual, Cannibalism

    Asami had a problem. Korra had given her such an amazing gift for her birthday, sacrificing so much just to make her happy, and now with Korra's own birthday less than a week away, Asami was completely stumped what to get her girlfriend. She wanted to give Korra a sense of what she'd given her, she wanted to show Korra what it felt like for someone to sacrifice so much just so that you can enjoy a single wonderful meal. But Korra had categorically forbidden her from cooking any part of herself; saying that she loved Asami just the way she was, with all her bits attached. It was sweet, but it left Asami in a bit of a lurch idea-wise. Not that she had planned to cook herself, but it was a possibility. The only one Asami had thought of that could convey how what Korra did for her meant to her.

    With one week remaining until the big day, Asami was actually getting sort of frantic about it.

    Then, without any warning, Asami saw her at a rally raise funds to help rebuild Republic City.

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    Korra frowned. That wasn't right. In Yumi's place Korra would be completely soaked and at her girlfriend's mercy. The reality of dying at the end bothered her a bit, but honestly, apart from that? The thought of Asami destroying her, of snuffing her for her own pleasure? It was one of the hottest things that Korra could imagine. Even harvesting herself all those months ago had almost failed when she had to stop a couple of times to relieve herself sexually before she could continue. But... Yumi wasn't enjoying this?

    “We could let you go,” Korra offered. “I don't want to hurt you if you don't want me to,” Korra admitted.

    “I do want you to!” Yumi reassured her. “Just... not sexually. Watching how much you're enjoying my sacrifice... It makes me so happy,” Yumi admitted.

    “If you're sure?” Korra asked. “I can go down on you, if you want. Just to- Just to make up for it, I mean,” Korra asked.

    “No,” Yumi replied firmly. “It would.... That would take too long,” her fan reasoned, “and I don't want the food Asami made you to get cold,” she finished with a sad smile.

    “I'm, I'm sorry you're not enjoying this,” Korra replied, “But I'll always remember you fondly!”

    “That's all I've ever wanted,” Yumi reassured her. “Please, enjoy me. From our kiss I can tell I taste incredible.”

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    Loved it, saved it.
    Looks like Asami and Korra now share a dangerous but tasty fantasy. :p

    P R O L O G U E




    The War was not a pretty one. There is no pretty war but The War started out pretty, in that it was relatively bloodless with a few bombings and mostly protests.

    But then the government was dominated by a single theocratic faction, and committed genocide like the world had never seen before. Missiles launched from satellites destroyed millions residing in ghettos instantly, millions more were locked up.

    Former allies knew something had to be done; They equipped and trained the remnants of the previous government and whoever would join them, and even sent in their own Special Forces. Rival superpowers took their chance and armed their own proxies with massive numbers of cheap but effective weapons.

    The theocrats found they had been both outnumbered by one revolutionary faction, numbering tens of millions of hardened soldiers, and outgunned by the other.

    It was at this time that the rival superpowers marched on their circumstantial allies with legions, and a single nation's civil war turned into an even bloodier World War.


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    Ghetto Cold War





    "You piss everyone off."

    "I know."

    "How are you alive?"

    "I don't know." I turned my head to stare at my friend. He stopped walking.

    "No idea?" Like he really wanted an answer.

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    Space Goo



    "Holy shit! Jay Cooper! I can't believe it!" groaned Alice as she stood topless in the cheerleader changing room and adjusted her makeup.

    "Believe it," said Jennifer with a smirk, "Tonight at Serene Lake Lookout. Full moon, clear sky, bright stars, perfect view of the meteor shower."

    "The star quarterback that single-handedly won us the championship last year, and he's been available for six months. Who hasn't made a pass at him? What have you got that the rest of us don't?"

    "Oh, gosh, I don't know. Maybe it's..."

    "On second thought, don't answer that. Damn you, Jennifer. What do you eat to make your tits so big?"

    Jennifer bounced her bare breasts in her hands. "Just good genetics, I guess."

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    I like it! Goo for everyone!
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    Frankly, they deserve this. Too stupid to live.

    Well written tho

    Dick Girl Incest, Impregnation and Snuff
    A Dick Girls of Gahoul Story
    Herm, inc, preg, snuff, implied can

    Pixie and Trixie were twins. Identicle twins basically. But everyone on Gahoul was identicle with their line. Pixie and Trixie were Snowflakes; one of the four races of dickgirl on their planet. All the dickgirls were beautiful, large tits, tight pussies, and above that, a nice big cock.
    Now the four races cooperated most of the time, but when it came mating time each month, they hunted down and fucked each other. And the sex always ended up with a pregnancy.
    So Pixie and Trixie were identicle, but they were also twins. They had shared a womb together, which made them sisters.
    It was almost mating time, and the two had a very kinky plan.
    "Damn, you look hot, Pixie."
    "Thanks Trixie, you look good enough to eat."
    Trixie giggled at the double entendre.
    "Come here you little slut," said Pixie, bending over.
    Trixie looked at the sight of her sisters wet pussy, with its large cock and balls hanging in front of it, and quickly made her way behind her sister. Sliding in her own hefty cock, she inserted her tongue in the hole behing Pixies neck and down to her honeypot.

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    "Her name was Faith. Her ass was red. So was her face.
    Her wrists were bound to her opposing elbows in a straight jacket. What else. Oh. And her tits were small, but her nipples. Jeeze. Big and long."

    "The one with holes for her breasts, that one?"

    "Yeah except this time, dig this, they were that small. She was flat chested, I mean the boob fat was there... barely. We decided to tie her nipples."

    "Her fault for not having boobs. So what did they do before you showed up, with her ass like that."

    "Well, they spanked her. A lot. But they saved her for me to rape."

    "Really?"


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    Her ass shook. Her whole body shook. Her arms gave in and she fell. The man sitting on neck stood up, pressing his boot into her neck, especially throat side. The other man, who was still sitting on her lowerback, presses a cigar into her anus. She screamed. Her feet pounded the floor.

    "PLEASE PLEASE SIR I'M SORRY AHHHH OH I'M SOK SORRR EE WAAHHAAA!" She was met with another spank to the side of her ass, needles bouncing inside of her. Her backhalf fell to the ground as well. The man sitting on her squat in place for a moment then forcefully slammed his ass on her tailbone.
    "OWWWwwW" She howled.

    She was the only one fully naked, save for the blonde girl she didn't see, and thought she was the only one there to suffer, not realizing the laughter of one girl was forced.

    "Start the stove." The man with his foot on the girl's throat commanded the other nude girl.

    "Stove?!" The redhead instantly imagined herself being cooked. "NOOO! GOD NOO PLEASE NOO NOO NOOO OH NOO HOO HOOOHHH!" Her screaming ans shouting melted into sobbing cries "OHHH oh nooo noo!"


    The blonde walked through a set of double doors, and for the first time crossed the view of the redhead being stepped on. Her ass was also red, but only from spankings, though probably with tools.

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    Just a short moment ago, he was at the bar, alone. Pounding back his own pathetic sorrows with vodka and gin, ever ashamed of his inability to ever find the right person and have sex. His friends teased him back at the university: “virgin.” Which, ordinarily would not have bothered the man much, but he was quickly on the path to twenty-four and he was ever aware of his age combined with his lack of experience.

    Lucas Ledford, known to his friends as Luke, wasn’t exactly unattractive. He had an uncontrolled brown mop for a hairdo and didn’t put much effort into his wardrobe, but he had strong features. Dazzling blue eyes, a boyish upturned nose, and full lips lightly surrounded by little blonde whiskers. It took him awhile for puberty to really set in (his voice only just broke at seventeen) but his looks were starting to settle in. Unfortunately for the young man, he was also rather short at only 5’7” – and his tiny dick didn’t help matters much.

    One could imagine his surprise, then, when someone came on to him that night. Luke could have sworn he had hit the jackpot. A woman approached him at the bar, a beautiful woman, that bought him drink after drink after drink. She had the most dazzling features – crystal-like blue eyes, gorgeous black hair, the most luscious lips imaginable, and the most perfect body form he’d ever seen. This woman was older, for sure, and he thought that maybe that was why she refused to tell him her name. But the youth was ever so turned on by this woman’s charm (and the drinks were helping, too) that he couldn’t resist asking her to follow him to his apartment. She accepted.

    Now, here they were, her smiling at him teasingly as he stripped down to his Hanes white briefs. He was worried that that might turn her off – after all, most of the guys his age had “graduated” to something higher than the most basic of basic. But the woman rose from her seat on the bed and gently placed her hand on the cloth that just barely protected his privates. He was slightly embarrassed at the wet precum that soaked through his briefs instantly as she touched him.

    “Luke,” she whispered into his ear, nibbling a little bit at the lobe. The young man moaned as his lips parted in a delicate smile. That was the first time anyone had said his name right – such delicate desire, copious amounts of sensuality that was enough to give him a permanent hardon. “Luke,” whispered the woman again, her hand slightly bending back the tight briefs that protected his bulging manhood.

    “Oh,” he groaned softly as her finger slid underneath his foreskin, tugging it up and down across his head. The young man knew he had to be careful – as a virgin, it was likely for him to reach orgasm with even the slightest bit of stimulation. Resist, he begged himself, bucking his hips in place as she played with his member curiously. “B-Be careful,” warned Luke, turning his head to face his lover.

    “Of what?”

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    Liv walked away from the reception desk and down the hall toward Suite 1056 - per her instructions - while absent-mindedly rubbing her arm just below the shoulder where she'd received the injection a moment earlier. Her raven black hair flowed unrestrained, tucked behind her fair, white ears, and slightly lifted by her gait.

    Not long ago, she wouldn't have expected to be doing this. Back when cannibalism was first legalised nation-wide, about a decade ago, it was all the rage for young people to go off to the butcher. Any occasion worth celebrating would have a feast, courtesy of a friend or family member, or sometimes just a person who'd done it for the experience. Now, though, with most of the willing population gone, and meat demand supplied by prisons, there weren't a lot of people doing it any more.

    Liv had made up her mind about a month ago. Her boyfriend's birthday would be tomorrow, and having been stuck in constant unemployment for the last 8 months left her at a loss for the funds to buy something she considered suitably extravagant. Then she'd seen an internet post detailing someone's DIY roasting of their teenage daughter. The recipe and final product had looked delicious, and seeing it convinced her of her course of action. However, she wasn't going to be able to cook herself, and her boyfriend was far from competent in the kitchen, so she'd called the meat processing plant just out of town to ask if they'd do a custom order for cheap if the meat was supplied. They'd graciously complied.

    And now, here she was, walking to the hall to - the nice older lady at the front desk told her - be gutted, before heading out to the kitchen. The injection she'd been given acted as a pain-killer and inhibited her body's natural tendency to repair wounds in order to ensure she'd remain alive and fresh for as long as possible. Already, she could feel a pleasntly light sensation creeping up from her extremities.

    Reaching the end of the long front hallway, Liv looked to her right to see the room she was looking for; a painted steel door with a thin, frosted-over window like all the rest. Straight ahead of her in the hall were the large, stainless-steel double doors that lead, industrial kitchen - she could hear the muffled whirring of dozens of machines, the bustle of factory workers, and the hiss of steam from just beyond. Not to long from now, she'd be in there, to be handled and fire-roasted. Just a big piece of meat.

    She turned to the door with the little numbers "1056", her blue eyes wide as a thrill of anticipation and fear made her heart speed up a bit in her chest. Timidly, she decided to knock, rather than barge in.

    "Door's not locked," came the reply from the other side.

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    I for one would love to see more of this. Consensual's always fun, and I like the twist on the "gutting and cooking" thing where she's living through the disembowelment and taking more of an interest in it.
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    This is great dude! You should definitely write more.
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    >>9688
    Random thought; what if as she nears the kitchens, Liv finds herself grabbed from behind; it turns out activists opposed to legalized cannibalization have taken it upon themselves to raid the facility and "rescue" as many people as they can.

    Of course they discover Liv's state of being, and fit her up with some (detachable) artificial organs. This allows her to both survive, and get into some rather kinky organ-play with a fellow survivor whom she falls in love with.

    Unfortunately, the government hits back at the activist group in the craftiest way; locking down the city they're hiding in, and closing up every grocery store. Seeing the group faced with starvation, Liv and her lover offer themselves to the group, realizing they were slated for death anyway. The group cooks and eats them as they share one last fuck.
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    Great story!
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    >>9680
    bump for continuation?

    New to guro fiction, experimenting with flash fiction (1000 words or less.) Feel free to leave a comment/feedback

    ***

    Wet slaps punctuated the silence of the chamber, mingling with the sobs of the naked bitch beneath him.

    "Quit your whimpering, cunt. You're dead no matter how much crying you do."

    Kimiko, the whimpering cunt, was bound to the guillotine, on her knees, head and hands thrust through a stockade above which a wide steel blade hung ominously overhead. Her body shuddered with each thrust of his hard dick and her yellow skin was slick with perspiration. He grabbed a handful of her plump ass, reveling in the way her flesh quivered and bounced from his pounding.

    He peeked over the stockade at the tripod-mounted camera. The lens was angled downward at her face to capture every moment of her anguish in high-definition. There were no spectators on the other end; only after he was finished would his fans get to enjoy the footage. The guillotine's trigger was connected to the nerve on the underside of his dick and he had been teaming her hole for close to a half-hour. He'd have to do a bit of editing.

    "Don't worry," he said. "I'm almost done."

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    I love it, I love how he told her to shut up, she doesn't matter to him, only getting himself off does, I'd love to read about some more of his victims
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    Hey, im a new to writing in general, i was wondering about a few of the choices you made while writing this. Email me if i can pick your brain. Thanks.

    This is a commission of mine which is a parody of a well-known daytime television. Perry Signer had a fantastic idea for getting the ratings of his show up, he was going to snuff eight porn stars on television.
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    Very nice concept.
    I can't say I liked all the victims, but I did enjoy the detail of the snuffing procedures :)
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    Any chance of a follow up with Mary, from chapter 7?
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    >>11174
    Not so far. I've finished the draft of the sequel, but it focuses on eight more porn stars (as the commissioner's request).
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    This is absolutely amazing.

    A real tour-de-gore and sexy crawl through debauchery and mayhem. Complete with a few side-entanglements that really bring it to life.

    Great work t'Sade!

    Cheers,
    Bill
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    Chapter 11: Ratings

    A week later, Perry sat in a chair in front of the producer, John Gray. "So, do you have it?"

    "I have six lawsuits going on and an FCC investigation. That is what I have," snapped the older man. He was sweating and kept reaching for a folder on his desk before pulling away.

    "Yeah, but they still let it air."

    "They let it because I had to bribe someone a million dollars to put it on the feed. Most of the show got cut off at the stations though."

    Perry shrugged and sipped his coffee. "Yeah, but you had pay-per-view sites up and running. You were thinking about moving the show to the Internet anyways. Screw the FCC."

    The producer sighed. "Yeah."

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    Milked and Harvested - A Vespah Story

    A boy's sister grows tired of his incessant erections, and his subsequent requests for relief from them by her hand. So, she Vespahs (Vortex Extracted Semen and Penis Automatic Harvester) him. Just how long can he and his manhood last, under the relentless machine's draining influence, before it takes everything from him..

    1 - The Final Straw

     "Ah, sis? S-sorry to interrupt you, but do you suppose that you could..?" James asked, his voice a bit tentative.

     Julie, who was relaxing comfortably on the living room couch, laying out along its length with her shoulders and head propped up on one armrest, looked away from her book and up to her brother. She arched an eyebrow when she saw him, standing before her with his shorts around his ankles, and with his penis, quite rampantly erect, pointed almost directly at her. His hopeful expression faded a bit when Julie's eyes narrowed as she regarded both him and his erection.

     "I took care of you this morning, James." Julie replied, her brows coming together in a mild frown. "It's mom's turn now. Go ask her."

     "I.. I know, and I did." James replied, biting his lip a little and looking worried at his sister's darkening expression. "She's busy making dinner, and said she didn't have time to do both before she had to leave for work."

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    5 - Learning about Vespah

     James, who had lost count of the number of times Vespah had had her way with him the afternoon and evening before, awoke the next morning to the sensation of his penis being, yet again, milked by the seemingly tireless device. The incessant machine forced its pleasure upon his flesh, then drew all it could out of his body, and left him limp, in more than one sense, shaking, and feeling quite weak.

     He had begun to recover from his most recent milking, and had started contemplating what the rest of the day might be like, when his sister and a stranger entered his room.

     "He's in this room." Julie said, not bothering to knock before she came in, over her shoulder to the visitor.

     The stranger turned out to be another woman, or perhaps girl, as she appeared to be only a scant few years older than his own sister, wearing light shoes, khaki short shorts, and a polo shirt bearing the colors and logo of the box Vespah had come in. She was carrying a small nylon work bag, which was open at the top and apparently full of miscellaneous tools and parts.

     "Oh, good. I see you've already got it set up and installed on him." the girl said, without bothering to introduce herself, or even give James more than a passing glance, before she peered down at the device strapped to his manhood. "Let me just give it a quick once over, to make sure it's securely attached, and that the fit is right."

     Without asking permission, she sat down on the edge of James' bed, and began pulling and tugging on the Vespah, peering intently down at it.

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    8 - Final Collection

     James awoke the next morning to pain. The sheer volume of it, which spiked up even higher whenever he moved, confused his sleep muddled brain for a few moments, before he remembered just why he hurt so much in the first place.

     Slowly, with mounting dread, he pulled back his covers, which he didn't remember pulling over himself before he had passed out the night before, to look at his groin. Right up until he saw the empty spot where his manhood should have been, he had hoped, despite the pain radiating up from it, that his crotch was okay. That it had all been just a dream, or a nightmare, or something.

     Unfortunately, it had not been a dream. The nightmare was all too real, and his cock and balls, so precious to him, were gone.

     It took him nearly an hour, moving slowly to prevent the pain from overwhelming him, to get off his bed, shuffle across the floor, while avoiding the smashed remains of his chair, and open the door to his room. He had tried to get dressed, but the pain, while he fumbled slowly and clumsily with his clothes, had been simply too much. So, still quite naked, he left his room. He walked, with tiny, careful steps, along the hallway wall, grateful for whatever extra support it could provide him, and made his way to the kitchen and dining room.

     His sister, dressed in her usual casual and revealing weekend clothes, sat at the table, munching her way through a bowl of cereal, when he entered the dining room. She watched, smirking slightly and saying nothing, as he made his slow, painful way over to the refrigerator.

     When he opened the fridge, gulping in apprehension as he did so, his manhood, still bound within the Vespah, was revealed. It sat between the carton of eggs and the half empty jug of milk, the gleaming steel of the machine encasing his cock looking rather out of place among all the food, with his testicles hanging sadly to one side. The small amount of his severed flesh he could see had all turned rather blue, and looked very cold.

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    Not actually a kink of mine, but damn! Very well done.

    That sister is a dirty minx.
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    Thank you, and yes, I had a lot of fun with Julie's character.

    On John's browser there was a new message from one of the ads that he had posted on those internet classifieds. These ads were for an adult modeling gig, placed in various cities, not his own. It read,

    Hello sir, my name is Amy Beth, and I am interested in the modeling gig. I actually live in a small town about 60 miles from Miami. Attached are some pictures of me. I hope this will be just the thing I need to get out of this nowhere town and on my way to becoming a star.

    The attached pictures were of a blonde girl with a baby doll face, smallish breasts, and a bit of a butt. John liked what he saw, and thought to himself, this was going to be fun. He immediately began planning his trip to Florida.


    John opened his laptop to reply to Amy.
    I'll be flying in to Miami tonight. I hope you’re ready for filming tomorrow. I've rented a location for the shoot. Its an old warehouse, I'm attaching a map so you know where it is. See you tomorrow.
    He sent the message off into the void of the internet, before closing the laptop. He laid back in the motel bed, anticipating the events of the next day.
    Though he told Amy that he was flying in tonight, in reality, he had been in town for the better part of a month, scouting out locations, buying and assembling his equipment. The last thing to do was to book his train back home, before the fun began.


    Amy Beth opened the email from the man that she hoped would help propel her to stardom. She couldn’t help but feel excited and nervous at the same time. She loved sex, so much so, that she wouldn’t keep a high school boyfriend, moving on to the next guy once she was bored. She had never been filmed before, and that was, she assumed, the source of the butterflies in her stomach. John had been telling her that this would be a BDSM shoot, and that the genre was gaining traction in the industry due to a certain series of books and film. She had tried being tied up before, and rather enjoyed it. This was going to be a breeze.



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    I'd like to thank Astrid P. and others for helping me write this story. This was my first real attempt at writing, I hope its guro enough for you all. Feedback is welcomed and encouraged, as I would like to improve myself.

    My first attempt at writing a snuff story. Not good I know, but would love some feedback still.

    Arya of House Stark confidently strode into the great hall, flanked by two soldiers. the dim lights and crackling fire creating an oddly eerie atmosphere. The walls were lined with armed guards, towering over the significantly smaller girl. Not that Arya was worried, even if worst came to worst she was confident in her abilities to protect herself. There was nobody more lethal with a dagger than herself.

    Not that there was anything to worry about of course.

    Moving without a sound, light on her feet just as the faceless men had taught her, she stepped into the center. Walking quietly was just one of many skills the young assassin now commanded. Others were stealth and acting. Both of which had served her well in uncovering Littlefinger's ploys and schemes.

    Littlefinger...Arya had last seen him in Harrenhal conspiring with Tywin Lannister against her brother Robb during the war of the five kings. She knew this man could not be trusted and had secretly shared her views and ideas with Sansa. She had agreed. Littlefinger was a vicious, small, spiteful man who was nothing but a nuisance. So together the Stark sisters had played a little game, tricking and teasing Littlefingers, uncovering his true intentions.

    Even this supposed arrest was nothing but a farce, the two sisters keen to prolong their little fun game for as long as they pleased before getting rid of him. The plan was clear, make it appear like Arya was the one being charged before catching Littlefinger unawares and turning the tables on him. Of course, they could arrested him right away instead, but the sisters were intent on giving him as little preparation time as possible. So if he was arrested beforehand he likely might come up with some annoying scheme. No, better catch him by surprise, Arya was looking forward to see his glorious expression once reality dawned on the traitor from the Vale.

    Barely able to restrain her gloating, having to try very hard to maintain her facade Arya folded her hands behind her lower back, grey eyes wandering between the flanking soldiers before briefly darting towards Littlefinger standing in the corner, and finally settling on her siblings seated at the high table.

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    I like it! Short and straight to the point. Nice twist on the show's events, and, in some ways, it's a change for the better. I still can't believe how the later seasons of GOT turned Baelish into a shadow of his former self. Littlefinger I used to know would get the fuck out of Winterfell at the first mention of "Chaos is a ladder".

    Canonically, there would probably be no post-mortem rape (faceless man or not, Arya was still nobility and someone Sansa was struggling to love throughout the season, I don't think she'd allow, let alone encourage such defilement), but hey, we're in Gurochan, so it's just a minor remark, not criticism.

    Since you wanted feedback ( / critique?), here are a few points. But these don't mean that the story wasn't enjoyable, by any means! It definitely was.

    * There are a few places in the text that would benefit from proofreading, i.e. Ctrl+F "the dim lights": a sentence starting with a capital letter, and one that isn't a grammatically correct standalone sentence (was it meant to be a comma there?). Same with "Littlefingers" in one instance. Also, I believe "War of the Five Kings" is written this way in-universe canonically, c.f. "World War II". And "they could arrested" should be "could have arrested" (and I believe there was one more such issue somewhere in the text that I can't find now). And "Every pair of seemed to stare her down" misses "eyes".

    * Some occasional minor issues with the "flow" of the text. For example, "She had agreed." would work better as "Her sister had agreed.", since there are two female characters here and the abundance of "she" pronoun makes it confusing. Another thing is "Both of which had served her..." which should be a part of the previous sentence (this perhaps qualifies as a grammar thing instead of a stylistic issue, but don't quote me on that). There's also "Sansa took a breath, Arya feeling a rush of excitement" which feels... off, I think this structure works when parts of the sentence describe things that *one* person can perceive, like "Lara fell onto the floor, her leg hurting and her vision blurred". Same with "Her mind blank, no idea what to say.": this sentence consists of two of these "additional" parts but misses the main part with the actual subject and the verb. The sentence with "twisted and trembling" in it has the same issue. And "~~" has no place in proper writing.

    * Speaking of style, the text sometimes jumps from a "literary" narrative style to a "casual speech" st

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    Oh my, thank you for that detailed response, sorry I only got back to you just now.

    Yes, I'm aware that kind of thing wouldn't really be canon, but hey, like you said this is gurochan. ^^ Also, thank you for pointing the various grammar flaws. Admittedly, english isn't my first language so I barely even noticed most of them but I'll keep them in mind and improve.

    Again, thank you for the detailed analysis, very much appreciated!

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